Swaying freely in the wind
Until night falls
Napping with it's head down
Fully open when daylight comes
Looking down upon other plants
One towering umbrella
Wilting ever so slowly
Each day could be the end
Round up all the seeds, and start again!
A contest entry
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900 points, ended November 9, 2008, 14 entries
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What did you think
Comments
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Cute in several ways. Of course one is the acrostic it presents. Another is the very fine description. Of course there is the one with vivid imagery. I want to thank you for your entry into the following contest: "To Be Put On My Favorites List."
Ted E
PS: Your entry has been blessed by the three wise clappers, but don't spend the whole nine points in one place(lol)!
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Great acrostic, I always find them so hard to write but you managed it with ease. Good luck in the contest with this one.
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Nice acrostic - I almost missed that it was there; maybe if you had not capitalised the beginning of each line that would have been even more subtle. Oh, by the way, you don't need the apostrophe in "its". Thank you very much for this entry.
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The images were really great, I liked the image of 'one towering umbrella'. I think that maybe it would be an easier read if there was some punctuation in the main body of the poem as it would break up the images a bit more but then I do think that it has something without it as well. A really good write though.
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