I respect and love my family
And the same from them is what they give me
I'm not very smart and I fail most of the time
But over the last year I've started to shine,
Finally I'm getting some good out of life
Which far surpasses my troubles and strife.
I've been through heartache, mostly pain,
but I got back up and started again.
But just when things seemed right for me,
The cruellest of things would happen to me
Another huge blow for my body to bear,
Lead me only into more wretched despair.
There comes a time when enough is enough,
And the game of life is just too tough.
The rules seem to change from day to day,
It seems to be one game I cannot play.
So with sadness I admit that I am beat,
No more comebacks, I'll just accept defeat.
Author notes
Written January 28th, 2004
A contest entry
- Show Me What You've Got by LostParamour.
500 points, ended September 16, 2004, 61 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Don't Quit
You shouldn't accept defeat no matter how difficult the game of life may be. Yes, we do feel like enough is enough sometimes but that is the way life is. You can't just throw in the towel and quit. Life is too precious and much to short to all the difficulties of life to keep you down. I did enjoy your write as it was very well written just a bit sad. Cheer up! and best of luck in the contest.
Avril
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Thanks for entering my contest... Good luck!!! I'll make meaningful comments when I judge the poems... I'm just thanking everybody for entering...
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Very well written, and sad, I hope you don't truly intend to accept defeat, because without a doubt, it's the challenges of overcoming in life, that keep us striving to be, and be our best. God bless you
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awesome.
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. Thank you so much for sharing your words and experiences with all of us here, and good luck in the contest.
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Good Luck
Good luck with the comp entry .... I hope you do well ...
Andy -
That's very sad and interesting...hmmm...
~Amanda~ -
Great job!!!! I loved it so much!! I know how u feeel, and I've been so close to giving up before and I know its tuff. Just like nOTTE I agree that Foamy is frikin hilarious and can always make me smile too. If you ever need a laugh or to smile, go there. Things will get better though. If they dont, then we're all tryig for nothing that will never happen and that would piss me off. But hopefully things get better. Stay strong!! Keep writing!!
~tonya~ -
You know, this seems like a defeatist poem- but I think it isn't. Just under the words I can sense your hope, and that's why I love this piece. Poetry can be a wonderful medium to let out these emotions, and you did a great job of it here. Well written. Thank you for entering this poem into the contest-
Jess -
There is sadness in your poem, however, tis a beautiful poem nonetheless!! always remember, there is always another day, well done and Good Luck in the Contest ~~wishintreeUK~~
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never give up!!!! hang in there. things will begin to shine. even the hardest days have upsides. i mean, u could think that there are a BUNCH of ppl that have it way worse off than u do. or make up a joke. or...oOoOo i kno!! the thing that always cheers me up is foamy's rant from illwillpress.com. it is too funny. everything will get better, dont worry. (u kno ive heard that stress makes your life span shorter)... well wonderful poem.
peace out
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very precious write Ms. Magnum, had very nice flow to it, although be it sad was still very nice, but as Ms. Pamela said, gotta hang in there, your days will come... best of luck in contest JP *s*
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Life can hand out some pretty tough blows...but hang in there..there will come a day when that light within you is gonna shine, shine, shine!
very good write, full of alot of the same things i felt at the age you are now..and periodically throughout my life thus far..the outcome is inside of you only, ya know
much love & peace
~Pamela
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