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A Best Friend

A best friend...is like...
Ice cold water
On a hot summer day
A tape recorder that will listen
As long as you provide the tapes
A security blanket
To wrap around you when you're scared
A punching bag
That will take every blow
(Not that you would actually hit them)
A sound proof room
That will hear your cries and never tell
This is what a real best friend is like
And so much more
That you'd run out of paper
If you had to write it all down.

A contest entry

Point out what you like and what you don't like.

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  • Rose Angel gold member
    April 26
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    I love your similes in this poem...Delightful read! Do keep penning!


  • HereComesTheSun
    April 22
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    you kinda broke the feel of the poem by adding the (not that you would punch them) you may want to take that out because it really ruins the feel you had going on it was really good up to that but i lost the good feeling. but you brought it back up at the end
    thanks for entering


  • Scyphon
    April 21

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    this was nice, and you had me with the punching bag, lol. I was thinking after that... hmmmm I'll be her friend but not her best (dont want Allison hitting me) lol best of luck in the contest


  • Torn.In.Half
    April 21

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    !

    honestly, i really do like it. it has a sense of realism and shows that you are a very intellegent person. i like it.


  • Trill - Trickle
    April 20
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    AWwWwW

    I love this poem sis!

    Keep up the flow!

    haha!
    Great write and fantastic write!
    Also.....
    who is this poem about!?
    lol
    Love ya

    Sincerely,

    ~Trill~


  • Nakatrea
    January 2

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    Very nice description of best friendship. The pink is a bit of a punch. For my poor eyes it a bit too bright . Pink works just not this shade Consider putting

    Not that you would actually hit them in ( ) parentheses
    since it doesn't fit the structure of the poem.

    Great job all together

    Keep writing!!

    ♥♥♥Kat


  • Angelo di Luce gold member
    November 25, 2008
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    True to say, and hard to find
    Thank you for your entry
    Good luck


  • Antebellum
    October 24, 2008
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    so true...

    you described a best friend perfectly

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