let's lie in the grass and count the stars,
and maybe,
after a while,
I'll take your hand,
.... or I might even have to kiss you
if that's okay,
and if you don't mind,
I'd just like to admire you,
and then we'll talk until the sun comes up
and I'll lean over and take your
strawberry wine lips in mine,
one last time
Author notes
what I want for Christmas.
cuore dislessico
"everything will change but love remains the same."
-Gavin Rossdale.
I don't think this came out right. But I don't care.
A contest entry
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Comments
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some nice romantic images
sounds like a love letter
and sounds very genuine
its beautiful, but not very subtle
(i wouldn't ask you to change it though)
-Thanks for entering my contest! Good stuff! -
i love laying in the grass and counting the stars! it is romantic! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox
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strawberry wine lips in mine.
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five words.
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"and I'll lean over and take your
strawberry wine lips in mine,
one last time" - I can't put into words what a beautiful ending that was.
You're a great writer. -
Short and sweet.
<3Nate -
Good. Thanks for entering and good luck
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Very beautiful
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After reading your author's page I am able to see the Cummings influence. This was sweet, sincere and flowed nicely.
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thank you :]
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wow...
what a perfect moment...this would make a cute love note
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thank you, for the comment and the lil clappy dudes :]
I think you read my mind, I've been considering giving her all the poems I've written about her, but idk if that would be too lame/lovesick puppydog-ish...
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Try giving her only one at a time...then its not lame, its romantic....*the crowd goes "awwwwww"* good luck with your girly love
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