As devastation is unleashed
coldness of distorted agitations
Uncontrollable shadows feeding souls
in everlasting transiences.
Oblivious suffrage of society's tears
fueling angst deep within
a twisted rebellious macabre
of life's reclusive mental storms
Abstraction in aesthetic conflictions
nowhere left to go
purging of emotional wonder
as the heart bleeds
obscurity
Author notes
PROMPT:
band- Rush ; song- Red Tide
prompt; http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ssMF2SuaqRM
Lyrics on contest page
30-50 words of wonder (used 50 words)
A contest entry
- Music Inspired Contest by Grey Mouser.
550 points, ended November 2, 2008, 3 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - BATTLE OF THE GOLDS Freeverse by Swan song.
1300 points, ended January 6, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Holy Moly! What a read this one is! Your take on is is fantastic! This is amazing! I can see why you got the gold on this one! Well done!
and lots of love
Nyetta
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Oblivious suffrage of society's tears
fueling angst deep within
a twisted rebellious macabre
of life's reclusive mental storms
This was some awesome stuff here.
A very fine poem indeed good luck to you!!!!
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ooh...nicely done, i can see why you won gold. keep up the writting, and take care
Stephanie ♥
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This is where we are with no where to go, so why do we chose to poison our own environment so? Wonderfully written with true meaning. Thanks for enteringinto the contest.
Be well and be blessed.
Mouser -
Powerful,
You captivate the pain well.
Seems there's always enough to go around.
Much love sis-star, bro Timothy
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Damn sis, wonderful work...I fought with this for 20 mintues...could not keep it under 50 words...my mind gets crazy when it comes to the earth and what we cause...you wrote it so well and with true meaning...great word choice...
Best,
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Nice job here, good luck in the contest. C
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