Tears falling into the frozen lake that is my life,
the memories that has attacked and battered my strife.
Thoughts that have been floating helplessly in my head,
causing the tears of poison making the lake dead.
The lake of poisoned tears cause the ice to form,
until i found the light to make it warm.
To make the poison stop spreading,
and stop the tears from sheading.
It might be a while until i feel this again,
and hope that the ice is thin.
Beacouse if this pain continues, i dont know how long i will last,
and maybe i will be just a floating memory...traped in these frozen tears.
Author notes
Memories floating on frozen tears
A contest entry
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800 points, ended November 13, 2008, 14 entries
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nice
This is a very nice story. Sad, but nicely written. Good luck in the contest, The Shaker
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woah amazing ending... sums it all up.. the poison is of pain or sorrow i assume, the light is clearly always "hope", though whats the ice that forms? and the dead lake, i know this is a metaphor of some sort bahh my brain is so dead... just a thought to prolong my comment hihihi
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whoa.
i feel the intesne emotions in this poem. your last line was awesome, though i thought you could have split it up and maybe made it stand as a lone stanza in the end. anyhoo, i still enjoyed this read, it was deep, sad mostly, but your descriptions and imagery were outstanding! keep penning and thank you very much for this entry. best wishes
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