Dead to oneself while walking among the living
Emotionally struggling with inner thoughts
Pain constantly in the heart
Red are the color of ones eyes as the tears fall day to day
Endless envy of smiling faces of hope
Sadness grows within
Stifling action and reaction to happiness
Insomnia grips throwing tosses and turns
Oppressing all future probability
Never happy with life
Author notes
Acrostic
The pictures used with this write I do not claim as my own. Pictures found on google and yahoo images.
Collaboration done with Glasyalabolas
A contest entry
- Show me your best! by Forgotten Anomaly.
1000 points, ended November 10, 2008, 63 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ACROSTICS by Anu-Nataraj.
400 points, ended February 28, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Well done! I love doing acrostics myself and the fact that this was done as a collaboration is even more intriguing to me. Beautiful work from the two of you here!
Jeremy0826
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Well done. I find acrostic poems to be difficult to write well. If one is not careful the poem sounds forced. This one is very well done and not at all awkward.
Great job.
Mike
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Good write, sad subject. Hurts a lot of lives.
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Ah, how I can relate to this peice. Five years it has haunted me and yet it seems to be all that I know these days. What is it not be like that? D O and N were the most gripping ones for me. Very creative and very good. Thank you for entering my contest.
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The second I got to your site and saw the picture of you looking into the camera, I saw a person who was hurt. Your eyes are very telling and very beautiful. stay away from drugs, but I think I am a little late for that personal line. I am so sorry you have been hurt for such a long time. I can sympasize.
This poem was very good. I just wish it were a little bit longer. Not just because you write well, but becuse it is need of a bit more of an expenation. Anyhows, it really is great. Good luck.
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well penned, madam!
i've been through a long depression and its really too hard to get over it..
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great job on this collab! Depression is a terrible state to be in but it is a reality for lot of us.
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AWESOME
you two have penned the perfect poem on depression...i know because i feel just like that right now
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EXCELLENT !!!!
to define a word...so well...and I hate acrostics
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STRONG FEELINGS BUT SO SAD
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Very sad but well writen! I can totally relate to this one! Great job
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Fantastic imagery of a place I've visted but have no desire to return ever again. You penned great feelings of saddness and dispair. Very well written. God Bless, Jo-Ann
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i am mad at you! you could have put this in my contet did you join my memory is slipping some days seriously i like this it was touching
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Very deep and sad.
What a terrible place to find yourself in.
Great job with this Actrostic my dear!
Jeremy0826
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intense..
and very powerfully sad. the write is excellent, and i'm impressed by this flawless collaborative effort, well done to you both!
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Sad, to say the least, but the tone used really brings out the point.Good work
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Well done hun Magnifico!
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Excellent
What a powerful acrostic. So very well done. Such a great collab.
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