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Beautiful Murder

Alone I am weak.
Alone you are weak.
Together we are strong.

Our love creates strength that is unimagineable.

I never thought it could be ripped apart
and torn into peices as it
is now.

Few more moments.
And you will be
torn out of my arms
your heart ripped from mine.

Our life long bond shatered.

You press your lips against mine.
One last kiss as i caress your
cold wet cheeks in my palms.

Never wanting to let go.
Never wanting to leave.

You hold me close stroking my hair.
I just squeeze you as hard as i can.
Wishing it would all go away,
all disappear.

I love you.
I love you.
I LOVE YOU!!!

I cant say it as many times
as you mean to me.
No words can describe my love.

They pull you away from me
and you take your stand on the platform.

I stand back
and know that this is the end.
I have to go on with out you forever.

The sword is pulled back
about to swing...

Tears run down our faces...

They let go,
The sharp blade rushing down to where you stand.

I run up to you and throw
my arms around your neck.
I hold you tight and brace myself.

Stop trying to push me away!

Seconds later...
we lie there in the pool of red blood.
We lie there nothing but our love and our corps left.
I wasnt going to live with out you.

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  • mackereth
    June 22

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    This poem started out really strong, and it kept that strength throughout the entire piece. I'm not quite sure I like how you ended it on such a gruesome topic, but I don't hate it. It is a tragic love story indeed, but I guess I don't like it because it could be a possibility that I am not ready to face. Thank you for forcing me to face the good and the bad.


  • Akarian silver member
    January 4
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    Very nice. Powerfull, raw imagry with some very real emotions. Good luck!


  • Jason Smith
    November 27, 2008

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    A very powerful writing about the amazing bond of live that can be shared between two people. One mistake that I did find was that you spelt sword with the o and the w switched around. Do not worry too much though, it is still a very good write.
    Good luck in the contest


  • A-Daisy-Among-Roses
    November 11, 2008

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    Very very nice. I like the story but it felt a little all over the place? I don't know how to describe it. In the beggining I could not tell what was going on.

    "No words can describe my love" - This is a bit of a cliche. I know I've seen it before.

    I really like the ending, its flow isn't perfect, but it is still really good.


  • xXtired-of-cryingXx
    October 26, 2008
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    I really do love this it is soooo great, congrats on making it into the finalists!

  • xXtired-of-cryingXx
    October 23, 2008
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    OMG!!!!!!

    THIS IS EXACTLLY WHAT I WAS LOOKIN 4!!!!!!!!!!!! I mean wow!!!!!! I love this peice sooooooooooo much!!!! You couldn't have done any better!!!!! In Fact, I don't think william shakespear could have done any better!!!!!!! Thnx soooooo much for entering!!!!!!! XxGooDLucKxX

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