go why don't cha!
I don't need u anyway!
Please wait I wasn't thinkin
I'm sinkln without u.
U help make me better.
I'd just die if u weren't with me
Come and console me
Cuz my mind is racing and heart
Is toasted I'm wasted.
What was the reason for this anyway?
Oh yeah!
Don't go stay
A contest entry
- Convince Me to Stay on Allpoetry! by crosscountry07.
750 points, ended November 10, 2008, 31 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is a sweet little poem! For some reason it reminds me of something my little brother might say to me after we've had a fight. Brings back some fond memories. Thank you for entering! Good luck! -Liz
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I am not very fond of the chatspeak. I believe that the reader will think of you as more intelligent of you typed out the full words. Say 'because' instead of 'cuz' and 'you' instead of 'u.' I don't think you really put much thought into this piece but I kind of like it. There are parts that are poorly thought out and others that sound as if you worked laborously to get them perfect.
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well thank u for your comment.and good luck.
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