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Parenthetical Asides

Consider things like  stars
(Twinkle, Twinkle)
A universe full of them
(Like paint splatters)
Ever expanding
(But making me feel large)
They are infinite
(And so am I)
Sparkle from afar, but up close it's just a rock
(I examine myself close-up, and I too look like a lump)
These observations have brought me to a theory
(I think that I'm a star)

Please tell me what you think

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  • a59teeth
    April 18

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    i really enjoyed this!! i like the parenthetical asides very much.

    due to the parenthesis their contents always felt like background info...Very cool.

    i like the lines, 'they are infinite
    (and so am i)'...wonderfully said!!

  • katsoccerqueen
    March 27
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    awww

    this just makes me happy this is such a cool wway to write a poem... i like the parenthesis and i love the line about stars being splattered across the universe like paint... i LOOOVVEEE this poem... and i can't for sure tell you why right now... but i do. keep writing!!


  • KatherineAnne
    March 27

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    Great write! I love the way you compared yourself to a star. Have you ever read the book "Same Stuff as Stars"? It was on the William Allen White list.It's a good book... I think you'd like it.

    Good job! =)


  • samuel.d.kendall
    January 28

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    First time I've heard it said that a star is just a rock. Thanks for a different way to see things.


  • Heroesrox
    January 10

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    Awesome job! I really felt the emotion behind this piece! An A+ job! Keep up the awesome work adn thanks so much for the share! I really am looking forward to reading more of your work....which I probably have already............ I read a lot of stuff on here and try to comment on everyones....Sorry for my mindless ramblings.............HAHA!!!!!

    Again.....Thanks so much for the brilliant write and share! Good luck with future writes....but judging from this, you don't really need much luck!!!!!

    ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~~*~*~**~Heroesrox~*~*~*~*~*~*~~*~*~*~*~*

  • vampedvixen
    December 5, 2008

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    This is cute. Perhaps we are all stars in our own right. I think it's great that you have realized how wonderful you are. Now shine on, bright star, shine on..


  • Tamera
    November 3, 2008

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    Yes you are, and finally you realize your own worth.
    This write is worthy as well. i like the form you used here. and the line "like paint splatters"


  • Bunny luv26
    October 23, 2008
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    I think you are a star too! Very well done and insightful work. Great work!


    • FelineMuse
      October 23, 2008
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      I think you are my favorite person today.


      • Bunny luv26
        October 23, 2008
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        Always happy to be someone's favorite person even for just a day. Best of luck to you in all things!

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