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Ask the Moon






Moon etched horizon's silhouette
as a young and eager night spoke;
we danced a rhythmic pirouette
when in my eyes true love awoke.

Then quietly you captured me;
music played as soft songs evoke
fear locked dreams, a long guarded key
when in my eyes true love awoke.

Dancers lingered - music expelled
moments that silent words provoke;
and I walked away, your face held
when in my eyes true love awoke.

Moon etched horizon's silhouette
when in my eyes true love awoke.

























Author notes

Prompt: "Hope springs eternal in the human breast" by Alexander Pope (1688-1744)




Kyrielle Sonnet

A Kyrielle Sonnet consists of 14 lines (three rhyming quatrain stanzas and a non-rhyming couplet).
Just like the traditional Kyrielle poem, the Kyrielle Sonnet also has a repeating line or phrase as a
refrain (usually appearing as the last line of each stanza). Each line within the Kyrielle Sonnet
consists of only eight syllables. French poetry forms have a tendency to link back to the beginning
of the poem, so common practice is to use the first and last line of the first quatrain as the ending
couplet. This would also re-enforce the refrain within the poem. Therefore, a good rhyming scheme
for a Kyrielle Sonnet would be:

AabB, ccbB, ddbB, AB -or- AbaB, cbcB, dbdB, AB.

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  • CitrineSunrise silver member
    November 15, 2008

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    The kyrielle sonnet is a lovely form to express tender emotions as you have done here. The refrain line was strong and worked in each stanza with a slightly different nuance. Thank you for your entry. Peace, Liz


  • Jesann gold member
    October 24, 2008

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    Such beautiful wording " Moon etched horizon's silhouette
    as a young and eager night spoke;"
    A joy to read


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    October 23, 2008

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    Beautiful. Perfectly executed to form and content is stunning to this prompt. Such hope and care. This is tender and soft like candlelight. ~Pamela


  • Wandika gold member
    October 23, 2008

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    Nicely done

    Glad to see someone write on the more positive side. I know I did not. But then that is just me.

    I find this to be an interesting form but I am so entrenched in a rhythm I find this difficult at this time to do. Not difficult to read.

    Jim