In the dark years of my life,
When I used to smoke and do other stuff,
you told me you cut yourself with a knife.
Shocked I asked "why would u hurt yourself!?"
You said something about your dad,
and to release pain.
Honestly, that just got me mad,
as I saw your beauty drain.
How could you cut!?
Why would you cut!?
You have soo much ahead of you!
What are you thinking!!
If your life is THAT worthless to you,
then why live it?
Take me outta my misery PLEASE!!
Why would you cut?!
You showed me the scars on your wrists,
the cuts were horizontal, so you arent gonna die yet.
It didnt matter I still got Pissed,
That part is something I cant forget.
Your scars were as ugly as can be,
and you sacrafice yourself just to be ""FREE""?
How could you cut!?
Why would you cut!?
You have soo much ahead of you!
What are you thinking!!
If your life is THAT worthless to you,
then why live it?
Take me outta my misery PLEASE!!
Why would you cut?!
I eventually broke up with you,
and now that I am clean total.
I cant stop thinking of you,
cutting your life away!
How could you cut!?
Why would you cut!?
You have soo much ahead of you!
What are you thinking!!
If your life is THAT worthless to you,
then why live it?
Take me outta my misery PLEASE!!
Why would you cut?!
-solo-
Instead of cutting yourself to death,
you cut your one true friend away.
You cut ME away...you cut me away...
(r) all rights to song reserved no matter what!!
Author notes
I used to smoke and tried weed. I am clean and have been clean now for about 9 months. May the people who cut KNOW what they do to people who are close to them. also, sorry for the one offensive word, in my opinion, it just adds to the feeling.
these are my first lyrics, easy please
A contest entry
- food for thought- ♥- cutters, noncutters, and ex-cutters by Immortal Obscurity.
875 points, ended November 10, 2008, 16 entries
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do you play any instruments to base your rhythm off of?
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honestly...no
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You wanted stern comments, but I'm not sure how I can be stern with such an amazing piece. I used to cut and have tried the whole weed and speed heroine whatever track. And those were the stupidest mistakes I ever made. You really did a good job in the beginning, because a lot of people cut to "release" pain, but in the end i realized that it just created more! This is a really awesome write, I hope you take gold in the contest.
ing with daggers,
Mylee
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I think this would make a great song. It had the same 'angsty' quality as a song like, say, 'Open Wounds' by Skillet, which I love, and I thoroughly enjoyed reading this, this bit in particular:
"You showed me the scars on your wrists;
the cuts were horizontal, so you aren't gonna die yet."
I don't know why, but there's just such simple truth within those few words.
This is, unfortunately, how most people react upon discovering that a close friend or family-member is intentionally harming themselves. It's perfectly-normal for us to feel that we are to blame for the person's pain, for not seeing the warning-signs when, in hindsight, they were painfully-glaring. It's easy to be angry, but we must be mindful that, should we react in this manner, that the self-harmer will only become more ashamed of him/herself, and be less likely to open up about his or her feelings. We need to, as friends, be compassionate and understanding, even if we do not condone the practice.
Cutting is not a suicide-attempt, but rather a mechanism for coping with life; self-harmers are, however, at a higher risk of committing suicide, so nothing said about it should ever be taken lightly. Keep your mind open, and keep being supportive; it makes all the difference, and you'll soon see that it's not your fault.
Thanks for entering.
Laura
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Hmm, I'm trying to imagine this as a song. I love it, don't get me wrong... But didn't the narrator try and help her first? That's kind of inconsiderate.
I struggled with cutting. I did it because of my dad, so this poem hit me smack in the face. Yeah, it is dumb, and at the time I really thought that I needed it. I haven't been clean for long though... I had a relapse unfortunately.
Good luck in the contest, this is really good!
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i did...but it didn't do any good
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nah, you see...I havent thought up of a rhythm yet...once i get the music in...it will sound better
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"Ten-to-one you can't dance to it."
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lol?
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