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Pale Reflections

Missing image
Transparently solid
marriage of fire and rock.

I sheltered a woman,
who was visible light
with lightening
in her crystalline nature.

'Tho time, her master,
took her from me
long ago;

I can feel her hand
on my skin.

Remember,
pale reflections
of her luminous face

as
time
  claims
    me.

Author notes

Contest: Windows and doors. by infinite spirit

Photo Credit: Lonely Window by Chris Conrad 2003

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Comments

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  • Maldronah
    August 9
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    Your poem has the feeling
    of etching on glass
    where the next line
    is inevitable
    and nothing may be changed


  • sunoir
    November 20, 2008

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    So beautiful in its anguish and the ending perfect in its final descent. A sad but wonderful read. I agree with Anne.


    • Skybow silver member
      November 20, 2008
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      Thank you my friend. This was actually very easy to write, practically wrote itself.
      I appreciate your comment very much.


  • Draig aine gold member
    November 7, 2008

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    thumbs up

    I sheltered a woman,
    who was visible light
    with lightening
    in her crystalline nature.

    striking vision, transparent yet so strong


    • Skybow silver member
      November 7, 2008
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      Anne your comment means a lot to me, thank you dear friend.


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    October 28, 2008

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    Ahhh, this one touched that softer place within me, leaving me to ponder time, and its taking...

    A moving write that holds the prompts well. thank you for such a moving entry to my contest. I am quite touched by this piece. Bravo! ~Pamela


    • Skybow silver member
      October 28, 2008
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      Thank you Pamela, this was a very beautiful contest to enter. Inspiring in it's challenge.

      • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
        October 28, 2008
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        Thank you for a lovely piece and Congratulations on being a finalist. Truly a touching poem. I loved it. ~Pamela


  • NeonRose
    October 24, 2008

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    Ah, time claims everything eventually...This has a haunting quality that weaves through the lines, bringing the reader a sense of sorrow. Best to you in the contest!

    • Skybow silver member
      October 24, 2008
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      Thank you so much, this one wanted to write itself after the first line. I tried to change the female subject to male but it wouldn't let me. It was a interesting experience.

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