“ ‘tis not so deep as a well, nor so wide as
church-door, but ‘tis enough. ‘twill serve…”
Romeo And Juliet
Act III, Scene 1
And if my name and nature were not so
mercurial, I might not have drawn my
blade when he offended you on this day:
to say your lips were porcine, painted
with such gloss to dupe men to believe you
were yet fresh and nubile still in manner.
By these insults I was forthwith made mad
and to the clash of swords went I gladly
to seek justice and relief for your fair honour.
Such was a justice deemed in that short spate
when rapier’s tongue pierced flesh and vital parts,
whence issues forth this crimson stream withal:
my days, my dreams, my breath, my love for you.
Unto this draining vessel clasp your heart
as arid earth absconds with all treasure –
I was yours by every means and measure
A contest entry
- Tybalt and Mercutio by Lauren Noir.
400 points, ended December 6, 2008, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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this is something else! I love how this was applied to real life.
Very clever indeed.
Good luck, thanks and well done
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are you satirizing Sarah Palin here or do you truly find her more kissable than Lady Hillary. I can't really tell.
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This began as a tongue-in-cheek topical reference to Palin -- but then I got carried away with the linguistic elements. Ergo, it's not effective as satire.
I thought Palin was an interesting choice for McCain until she opened her mouth. Clearly, Hillary Clinton is better equipped to be President. As to the kissability of either, I am an old man and beyond such considerations.
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I have always identified with Mercurio, being a Gemini. You have shown him well, and also the fatal movement of time from the moment a sword is drawn.
As always, the final line wraps up and ties a bow on your poem. Beautiful.
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Mercutio was always my fav, probably because I used to be a hot-head who liked to fight. The years and a few ass-whippings have mellowed me and I no longer seek the bubble reputation in the canon's mouth. Still, I thank you for your sweet words.
Mac
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