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Don't Want To Try Anymore

I don't want to try anymore
I don't, I don't
I'm sick of who you are
And who I became
When I was with you

I'm don't want to lie anymore
I've grown to fear you
Afraid to be even near you
Because who I am, and who
You've become are two different people
And I'm sick of being numb

I was always around your finger
And under your thumb
Shadowed by your 'greatness'
Living in your little 'slum'

Maybe now, it's finally over,
Maybe it was never meant to be
Maybe it's that I've finally become
What I was supposed to be
Or maybe I've always been this way
And you could just never see

I don't want to try anymore
I don't, I don't, I DON'T
Because...
I'm sick of who you are

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  • cazzy71
    July 25
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    vengeful

    Full of vengance,full of rage.A good write,very good.


  • Kathraina silver member
    May 14

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    Ouch, biting last line!
    I've definitly felt this way before. Marvelous job with this write, the emotion is here is very strong.
    Bravo!


    ♥ Kate


  • borrowing.moonlight gold member
    March 12

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    wow. yeah, i can relate to that. it's tough... good write. great job with the subtle rhyming (i'm picky about rhyming) good write. thanks for entering


  • DancingQueenAngi
    March 1

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    Such a tough place to be! Great start, but I think this could use a little more polishing.

    Thanks!
    ~Angi

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    February 9
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    Thank you for your heartfelt piece, Josie


  • Ms Raneika
    January 27
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    Very emotionally thoughtful piece.

    Thanks for entering!

    Love, Raneika


  • reckless abandon
    January 19
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    wow, a lot of people can connect with this, and I certainly can. thanks for sharing


  • broken-angel
    January 11
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    great write x


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    January 2

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    I think your writing styles has greatly increased. I think you understand yourself more now as well emotionally and poetically. I think you have fused them together to create something beautiful.


  • Heroesrox
    December 30, 2008

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    Awesome job. Keep up the great work and keep writing great pieces like this one!!! You have enough talent for probably all of us here at Allpoetry! Truly a great write. Such an astoudning and amazing job. If you feel like it, check out my poems and feel free to comment them! Be honest, please! Thanks so much for sharing this piece with all of us here at Allpoetry!
    Oh, I just started a new contest! Please take a second to view it and try your hand at it if you wish!

    Here is the link to my new contest! http://allpoetry.com/contest/2431805

    Thanks so much! Have an awesome day!

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  • JM Kenyon silver member
    December 29, 2008
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    Lots of anger and angst here. I would say that, if you still feel the same as when you wrote, it might be time to speak the words instead write them. There's no good in being miserable because in the end, even if holding it in out of compassion, it's the least compassionate thing that can be done for all involved. Hope all turns out well. s and best wishes always... ~Genie~

  • snugglz
    December 7, 2008

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    wow!

    lots of angst here.but also an awareness of growing up in one way or another and realizing sometimes waking up is one of the better dreams we'll ever have.great work!


  • XXxFAKExXx
    November 8, 2008

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    that last line is so powerful.
    It is like the "key word" of the whole poem.
    Great work.
    And an amazing poem<3


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    October 26, 2008

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    I like the honesty and the intensity of this write bringing the inner truths and the internal emotions of this life..a touching poetry you brought..well done...

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