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Becoming One

Face to face
Mouth to mouth

Me inhaling your air
Warmed from within you

You inhaling my air
Warmed from within me

Intermingled essence
Intoxicating senses

As we
Become one



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Lionheart--4 entries

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  • catz Moderators member
    November 6, 2008

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    This is a lovely poem, Richard. Subtly senseous and personal.
    That feeling of being one with the person we love is a wonderful one and moments like this are wonderful.

    Beautiful write


    Dee