By now its just a game to me
Catching you in lies
Discrete or blatant you cover them all
With your eyes staring right at mine
You have to know I’m smart enough
Not to trust a thing you say
But dumb enough to stay with you
While you lie to me all day
Whatever sounds good to her, you think
I’ll swear with my whole heart
That on her life, her heart, our love
I’ll begin a brand new start
Lately, however, that’s not enough
For when you look me in my eyes
Its hard see your blue eyed gaze
While I only search for lies
If a drunken stupor means more to you
Than your family and your friends
You’ll lose more than you bargained for
A lover and your best friend.
Author notes
Apologize
4) Mark Twain:
Always tell the truth. That way, you don't have to remember what you said.
also 13- write about lying and deception and the problems you face because of it
Alittlewrong
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and yet another one. i am not completely stupid. i know that accidents happen and we sometimes enter under other names but for me to believe ten writes have had your name on them and weren't done by you is a bit much. the contest allows for two.
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thank you for the entry into my contest and i wish you the very best of luck as well. viyanna rosemarie
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this is really good, it's a different perspective then a lot of the entries in this contest, but it's a valid one, and you have captured your feelings so well, best of luck in the contest
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I like the way you worded to beginning, it really drew the reader in. There was one spelling mistake, 4th stanza 3rd line, I think you meant glazed not gaze. I like how you showed that the booze was ruining the relationship, that is what I was looking for. Good descriptions and imagery. Good job and good luck in the contest.
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One great thing about Allpoetry is we can get the garbage out of our systems in creative writing.
This is a really good example of release through creativity
. It tells a powerful story, one that may give strength and hope to others.
I'm from the other side, been there, done that, a out and out addict/alkie. These days I'm clean and sober and still trying (sometimes impatiently) to clear the wreckage of the past, instill trust and live honestly.
You have every right to be angry, sad, frustrated etc...
A great write from the heart
Best Wishes -Emmjay
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very serious anger here, understandably so. thank you for your entry and i wish you the best of luck in this contest for the book. viyanna rosemarie
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Wow!, erm ok. what can i say. This is deffinatly full of anger. I can feel your, hurt, betrayl, anger, pain. All of it is so evident. I am so sorry you have had to go through this.
Your words are so powerul and so full of life.
I can really feel your emotions.
Thank you so much for entering my contest.....This is a fantastic write. -
Great job on this piece! Works really well with the prompt. Great imagery and flow as well. Thank you for entering and good luck!
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Wonderful write! I can not at all stand liars! They make me sick, You captured the feelings very well in this write and it was fantastic. Thank you for sharing
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very very nice. i hate liars more than anything else, even though i lie way too much. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck.
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i liked this poem, the only things i would criticise is the last line which i think may be made a bit more poignant and powerful, plus the rhyme scheme was a little weird but i dont know if that works to its advantage or not, it looks like i might need to give this poem another read so to the finalist with ya!!!
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After a while we just get so used to someones lies or the times they are lying, we can spot it a mile off and wont put up with it anymore. There's a breaking point for everything.
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This is a great poem you wrote here. I can totally relate to your poem. THank you for sharing and best of luck in my contest!
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Thank you for entering my "Celebrating Poetry and Poets" competition. However, you seem to have misunderstood the purpose of it. For your poem makes no mention of either poetry or poets! Maybe the speaker in this poem - or the person addressedm- is intended to represent a poet - but this is not stated in the text itself, and it is on the basis of the text itself that a competition judge must decide. Sorry - but for this competition your entry has to be considered a "non-starter". But I wish you luck with it elsewhere!
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i like it
This really tells it like it is , I like it
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hummm that is the way to tell a drunk. I have lived this life. And addictions like these do destroy families. It is a sad fact. You wrote this poem very well. And thank you for changing the fonts for me and the color as well. I very much appreciate you doing this. thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into my contest.
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This is extremely hard to read as the black fond blends in with the background. Could you fix that so I can read and comment on this. thanks
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I changed it, you should be able to read it just fine right now. Thanks for all the comments :-)
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whoa. this is such a tragic story that many people could relate to very well. this is beautifully penned! i like this poem very much, it had meaning to it, and it was so deep, it held a message!
wise wrods keep penning 
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this poem tears at the heart. so many families ive with this or very similar circumstances. It's a sad story so many can relate to. you do an excellent job here of describing not only the heartache, but the torment of wanting to trust someone, but knowing that they will disappoint you repeatedly, and also, of knowing that you are nearing the end of the road with the repeated actions. I hope that for you, this story comes to a happy ending. keep strong. very excellent write.
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I absolutely loved this poem! The rhyme did not seem forced and I loved your descriptions. You used very...I don't want to say pretentious...but I like your use of larger, less common (slightly pretentious) words. I believe that colorful language like that increases the interest of the reader and the quality of the poem.
Kepp writing!
McCaylee
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