I'll wait until you realize,
and look deep into his eyes,
you'll see through his disguise
and all those nasty lies.
We've known each other forever,
And you know I would never
lie to you for just whatever.
But, baby, we're meant to be together.
He's the darkness and he won,
he stole my shining sun,
but with fighting I'm not done,
'cause I know I'm the one.
You're the ones in my dreams,
and I'm in yours, or so it seems.
Baby, I'm the one.
When you come to me,
you will finally see,
like honey and a bee,
we are meant to be.
I've been here all along,
I even wrote this love song,
with me is where you belong,
but 'till you come, I'll be strong.
He's the darkness and he won,
he stole my shining sun,
but with fighting I'm not done,
'cause I know I'm the one.
You're the ones in my dreams,
and I'm in yours, or so it seems.
Baby, I'm the one
In your dreams.
When will you ever see,
that you're really in love with me?
You've always kept me in the shadow,
but I should have let you know
that, baby, you're my one,
you're my shining sun
when the rain is fallin',
you're the one that I'll be callin';
'cause without you to brighten my day,
all I see is gray.
You might think he's your one,
but the war he has not won,
'cause, baby, I know I'm the one.
Author notes
NOTE: it's from a guy's point of veiw.
option 4. jacob diary entry [[to bella, duh.]] [[before breaking dawn, also duh]]
I actually didn't write this for twilight...it just happened to fit perfetly lol. 
GO TEAM EDWARD!
option 4. jacobs POV
option 1. pictures : http://et0ileuh-magic.deviantart.com/art/CINDERELLA-53778426 [[except from a guy...]]
"Love is just a word until you find someone to give it definition."
"In the end, I may fall, but with you by my side, it will be as if I had not fallen at all"
lyric option
A contest entry
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550 points, ended November 10, 2008, 22 entries
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Should I change the rhyming? It seems a bit powerful having the whole stanza rhyme like that...
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This is my second time reading this. I like it, nay love it. It shows Jacob's feeling so well. I love the lyrics. Amazing job Good luck. -
xD poor team edward! I love this though I was thinking twilight when I read it, but I could see how it wasnt exactly twilight, and it fit well, but not perfectly, after all Jake was Bella's sun =P BUT! It was great! I loved it ^_^
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It is a pretty good song, and I can see where it's going...
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This is really good... I'm not a songwriter, so I don't think I can critique that well, but I think I like the chorus in your author's notes better. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
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wooow this was amazing and are you kidding me i love the rhyming, i prefer the second chorus tho the one in your authors notes, that one fits well.
thanks for entering
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This was a lovely look at one's feeling for another. And I do think as you continue to edit it more, it will sound even better.
I liked it, it was good.
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It sounds good and flows well…. Very descriptive.
Very well written and laid out …. I enjoyed reading this one
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Yeaa, loved the book, hahas. No prob
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I thought this was lovely and totally described the relationship between Jacob and Bella. Thanks for entering and good luck
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you've read twilight? awsome! thanks
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This is quite very nicely done!!!
Good rhyming and well doen on the prompt
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Nicely written I could hear Jacob saying these words and feel his pain. I can also see how Bella has eyes only for Edward. you did very well with this Thank you for entering
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