Watch me get shot down, lose my mind and fall
I just realised I mean nothing to you at all
What is the point of carrying on?
When everything in your life is wrong
All you thought was real and was what held you up
Has been ripped away, the doors been slammed shut
Those who I thought loved me
Have always hated secretly
And I can’t really blame them
I always seemed to shame them
Why should you have to live with such a state?
Leave me on the bridge here to live my last fate
A shattered mind and twisted lies
That’s all there is to see inside
Watch me as I run and hide
I cannot take your way of life
So get a good spot in line
To watch me go and take mine
The storm has really started, did it ever stop?
Leave me broken hearted, and shoot the final shot
I’m alone for forever; I guess that’s how I’m meant to be
Always run and never, Let them see the real me
That means too much explaining
Of why tears are always raining
And why the light never shines my way
Why I’m living in darkness every single day
I’ll bet they’ve never seen a wake
On the way to be burned at the stake
They won’t be able to say that anymore
Listen to those cheers as I hit the floor
Glad I could make you smile
And hey it was in style
I just ask of you one thing
Don’t patronise with your eyes
On faked and staged forgiving
Why do they fake they’re feelings?
We all know I leave them reeling
And these glances I keep stealing
Prove you know I have no meaning
No one wants me here
Can’t you hear the cheer?
As I scream I’m gonna leave
They’re so happy you won’t believe
They’re handing me the knife
And begging please do it tonight
I fight the storm all alone
No one here I’m on my own
I gotta drag myself away and up
Jump off the cliff where lightning struck,
I guess I’m not a burden anymore
I won’t be back rest assured
You can stop it now stop all the pretence
You never have to worry about me ever again
The storm has really started, did it ever stop?
Leave me broken hearted, and shoot the final shot
A contest entry
- SAD Poetry--- Let Me Have Your Best by Ativan.
900 points, ended November 2, 2008, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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wow this was amazing. very very sad. beautiful rhyme and flow to it. a bit long but worth reading! i can feel the intense feeling in this...
i really liked this stanze:
"The storm has really started, did it ever stop?
Leave me broken hearted, and shoot the final shot
I’m alone for forever; I guess that’s how I’m meant to be
Always run and never, Let them see the real me "
anyway. good luck in this contest.
~Madison~

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wow thanks for the positive comments
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I really enjoyed the flow. In some parts it was awkward but in others it was brilliant. I can tell you have been sad for a very long time. I am glad you have poetry as an outlet. Thankyou for entering the contest. Keep writing.



