Inelegant distress and dismal aptitude-
disdain quarters the final dream
and you're left gasping for that last breath.
Assimilate the pieces
and coat them in perplexities
so that next time
When I fall apart
(You won't be able to pick up the pieces-
they'll shift and they'll slide,
disturbing in their defiance
bitter in their regret.
You'll misinterpret their melancholy
for something much colder
and suddenly you won't even understand
what you were trying to accomplish
in the first place)
Come on darling,
take another long swig
the consensus is dead anyway.
Author notes
Vocabulary?
Drugs(more in relation to alcohol though)
LivingEmptySpaces
A contest entry
- [Gorgeous Vocabulary ♥] by whiterabbit..
400 points, ended October 29, 2008, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be harsh, be specific.
Comments
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I really like this. I love the descriptions and the emotions that come out of this. I know you asked for constructive criticism but I don't have any to give. I guess that's a good thing
Amazing write doll and thanks for entering.
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