You ever felt the pain of never?
Is something you lost lost in time?
The pain of something lost forever,
Wracks me with pain through out my mind.
Time itself looses all meaning,
My hope as well just seems to die.
Now my soul has the feeling,
Like it's being swept in sorrow's tide.
Some say it's better loved and lost,
Than never to have loved at all.
When one of those who I love most,
Departs from me pain consumes all.
I wish I could make them come back.
And they'd stay with me forever.
But I have to live without that,
And live with pain of loss and never.
Oh loved ones where hast thou been gone?
Tis much farther than I can see.
Why should I even have loved ones,
If they won't always be with me.
Get away from me if you please.
My heart would too easily bond.
The pain of loss is no mere tease.
Do not become a lost loved one.
I feel that I am doing better. What do you think?
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I like ^_^ those heres critisizm.. (yes i spelled that wrong) -- 9 lines up from the botton the word "where" is misspelled.
If you maybe seperate it into stanzas it would be much easier to read.. as it is it is hard to keep up with what verse you are on...
Other than that. I enjoyed this poem greatly. My dear, you know how to move your words and have people understand what you are feeling. all you need to do is get your work our there.. and i think you will have a great following..
much love dear ^_^
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Very well appreciated. Rectified and corrected.
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love the poem man btw its nick idle
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