Why do I cry?
Why do I hurt?
How can i still feel pain?
Being hurt time and time a
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How can my my heart take ANYMORE?
Why does my heart take M
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E?
Why does my life barrarde me with all the negative?
Does my worldwant me to fail?
In the future will i give up?
How can anyone who has been through so much think of the positive?
My future has v
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n
i
s
h
e
d....
Why should i kepp going....?
Will I die for peace?
While I try to pick up my life...
but everything just keeps f
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l
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n
g apart....
I have one question for you....
When i fall to peices.....
Will you put me back together?
Or am i just to simply Broken Beyond Repair
Author notes
ummmm ... i havent listed any poems in a while.... so i just wanted to put one out there
ummmm i hope u like it... sadly this is how i feel... and i dont know whether i can change it! o wellll
A contest entry
- *~!~*Love, Sad, Depression, Many Options*~!~*ENTER NOW by Shannon62875.
405 points, ended November 18, 2008, 24 entries
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wow!!!
This is a very good write and i loved the falling part and then had the letters falling... that was really good and just made this write much more strong!!! I hope you get through this... Keep up the great work and good luck in my contest!
Shannon*Leah -
You can be repaired
You do this kind of formatting very well, and the emotions of pain are felt in your write. This is very sad and dark, surely if you are so broken, there is a guy or girl in your world who can glue you back together again. Great write and keep on rocking the world with your poetry
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Sweety, I'm sure there are many people who would be willing to help "put you back together". I would help you in any way that I can.
I know what it's like to feel this way, currently I am feeling in a down, I don't give a care, who would even want to put forth the effort to listen to me kind of mood myself. I'm here for you. I love you.
I like the format of your poem, how you s t r e a t c h out some of the words to create a unique effect on the reader and pull them further into your poem. You did a great job on this and expressing yourself.
just remember, there are some who do care. There's no such thing as perfection in a human being so don't set your goal that high. Just do your best and be yourself. That's all any people should expect of one another.
♥
-Kaela
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i will put you back together ans just to make sure ill use super glue this poem was beautiful and im sorry you fell so bad if its worth anything i care
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wow... this is raw and I can actually tell we have one thing in common... we both feel liek total outcasts
love ya! thanks for sharing!
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Oh honey I hope you feeel better really soon
Can you tell me why you feel this way for I have helped many find their way back to a happpy place .For at my age I have been there and done that so please talk to me .You have penned this poem so well and you are very unique in your style . Talk to me anytime you feel down Im here for you always Love your AP Mom
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