When the poem is no longer here, is when I'm coming.
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Time to move on
Are you solving anything by blasting the past? All you are doing is harboring pain in your own life. Move the f on and do something better with your life! P.S. As I remember it you were so piss drunk on Catalina the cops had to come to your room to break up a fight. Kinda the pot calling the kettle black huh? Kinda blows your credibility.
It really shows lack of respect for your own sister, bringing her marriage into this. Manipulate your own life in a positive way instead of wasting your energy to try bring others down. -
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Oh geeze, you're right! How couldn't I have seen the error of my ways.
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Your father, your agenda. Good write.
But honestly man? Letting him stew in his own brand of shit makes the suffering last and the energies free to do something more worth-while.
If he isn't worthy of love, is he worthy of hate? Either involves passion. Passion is obsession. Reduce him to the lowest order and move on. -
holyshite, you made me cry...
I wish I could get my anger out like this, I reread it because you changed the title and it looks like you added more to it. I don't even know where I would begin about my mother and father and what they did and how they made me feel. I dont know how to get it out. Somedays I wish I could be so bold like you, but then again maybe I should leave all that in the past. You are really great at getting your point accross. God if only I could get it out and tell how I felt about it all, i'd probably be happier in my life. -
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Fuck them all. When they pay? It will be in blood.
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Had to edit it. No more drunk writing for me!
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Hard core and phenomenal. This one is packed with venom and rightly so. I believe that every parent that never was one should read this. It says what most of us have felt left in their wake of crap and does it with force.
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"I am fueled
by the souls of every child that has suffered at
the hands of idiotic materialistic sadistic tyrants, and wicked whores."
there is a man of history, notorious, who i will not name, but of whom i think you could relate to. i pray you peace.
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Jesus
I will always wish for you to bury the disgust and refuge your parents have willed to you as a boy and son. You are now a proud man and father moving forward on your own ideals, fucked-up as they are, they are yours. He'll eventually run Nicole's marriage to shit and the dogs will chew on his dried up bones under the rotted lemon trees. -
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It's a countdown now.
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I feel for your situation. I hope you can heal from your suffering, if this is indeed a true account. It's a wonder that some of us behave like vermin and, even more incredulous, that we all breathe the same air.
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I do not breathe.
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He'll pay a huge price not getting to share the lives of his son and grand children. But a prick like him doesn't deserve that privilege.
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No, he won't. He'll mumble about me being a drunk, and continue living in denial actually.
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This is very powerful, honest and authentic. Hope fully the venting has allowed space for healing.
The most impressive part for me was the narrator's breaking of the cycle, refusing to hand on to his own children the legacy of violence and hate.
I responded most to this line: I am fueled
by the souls of every child that has suffered at
the hands of idiotic materialistic sadistic tyrants, and wicked whores
This was painful to read, and I am sure will resonate with others who suffered abuse as children, powerless and doomed to suffer until they work their way out of the quagmire.
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Jeremi,
I love the very honest in your face way you write. No one can deny your talent there... I can understand these words because if I was more open about my anger, I could see me writing these words about my own father.
"It's about where you were when
I was being raped by the world"
You express your anger very well here. I hope for the sake of your boys that you forgive him and move on with your life. It doesnt sound to me like he's worth your time anyway.
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Holy Shit!!! Jesus Christ!!!
He still owes me $$$. Son of a "Preacher Man"...he's been dead to us for years.
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get it out, get it all out... and then run down the street nude...
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Wow. It's really amazing to me how open you are in this poem.
I couldn't imagine saying the things I'm feeling. So I think you deserve kudos for that. It's sad to hear that you had a rough life but it sounds like you have learned a lot of things from it. It makes you a better person, right? Lestways I think it does. I thought you did a great job of expressing yourself here.
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