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Sheltered ( HM )


 

Once, pale faced,

ink drops corrode acid tears,

burning pains past.

 

Masquerade deceased perception,

beauty her mirage fades,

it;s only an illusion...

 

Illuminating coloured spectrum,

purple haze and jasmine,

paint skies of midnight shadowed moon.

 

Stars shooting,

falling like diamonds,

for is my luck to change ?

 

Umbrellaed shelter,

embraced,

open hands share the rod.

 

Laughter amongst the pelts,

splash puddles,

dancing rhythmically, sensual beats.

 

Hungered hearts dissolve,

liquidating,

upon our elevated lust.

Author notes

c.] "Come feed the rain, 'cause I'm thirsty for your love dancing underneath the skies of lust. Feed the rain, 'cause without your love, my life aint nothing but this carnival of rust" - Poets of the Fall - Carnivals of rust.

Just because I love this beautiful song

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zRVrQsdWDds

"The itsy bitsy spider climbed up the water spout"

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  • chilali
    October 28, 2008

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    Great, great, great write! I absolutely loved this! Wonderfully written. Great take on the prompt. The imagery and the flow is flawless!! Thank you so much for entering my contest and good luck. Oopsie. You forgot to mention "the itsy bitsy spider climbed up the water spout" in your AN. If you've read the entire contest page, you'll know why I want it there Thank you once agian for the great read!


  • Abe 1
    October 23, 2008

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    wowza dis song is fab ya did as usual a brill job in makin it yr very own
    gd luck in de ladies contest
    cheers abe


  • Leonura
    October 23, 2008

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    Such a wonderful poem. something that pulls the image out and lets the reader see, such talent is beautiful.


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    October 23, 2008

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    this absolutely blew me away when I read this one. this one is beautiful and so very perfect for the option you have chosen. I love it Mum... I love you more..

    Love does that you know. changes people, their outlook. like I've been saying of late... and with my very own quote
    "love is like a ripple in the ocean, it touches everything..

    good luck Mum

    kat


  • daviscth silver member
    October 23, 2008

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    Illuminating coloured spectrum,
    purple haze and jasmine,
    paint skies of midnight shadowed moon.


    Sis, I just love this stanza!!! The imagery is so wonderful in it! Good luck......


  • Topaze
    October 23, 2008

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    A lovely piece written with such elegance. Best wishes in the contest.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    October 23, 2008

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    Very dark opening, with superb imagery 'ink drops corrode acid tears' is brilliant! I love the word 'liquidating' to, portrays some great visuals. An excellent write, seems your muse is going strong...but then isn't it always This should do well hunni, fab read! Good luck


  • MD Masroor
    October 23, 2008

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    wow.. I loved the imagery, and even though my take on it was completely different, I still think it's better than mine. Deep words with a deep meaning, I was completely taken into this poem. Even your structure here was amazing! Good luck with the contest!


  • MD Masroor
    October 22, 2008
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    Omg! I can't wait to see what comes! I love the song!

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