Looking Beneath The Roots by luckynsincere at All poetry

Bound - tied into a mask of pain;

no hope to gain.

There: scars and lies,

just hear my cries.

Still muted by fears that beget,

alone I fret -

is where I’ll stay

‘till that sweet day.

Souls shall mend, once lips seal the fate

with one true mate.

Where the lone ends

true love begins.

Author notes

pic credit: http://i223.photobucket.com/albums/dd9/clutzycara/SnowBeech.jpg

as a self description... no words more than five letters was a tough challenge, as I re-wrote it at least a million times. I enjoyed the challenge My self description is confusing for me to explain. As I just guess I wear a mask to conceal my inner most feelings and pains that come from the past. I, though am completely in love... will always be seeking deeper meaning within this relationship and trying to understand the concept of "true love" and destiny! I am a book, seeking the filled pages

A contest entry

Evil Minds Have Plotted against LuckynSincere, LadyDementia, ArkBear and Ktulu Blackwolfe only. by Ceridwens Soul. 1000 points, ended November 13, 2008, 4 entries
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morgana raven
December 23, 2008

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Bound - tied into a mask of pain;

no hope to gain.

There: scars and lies,

just hear my cries.

This beginning stanza was simply wonderful, i love the punctuation and how it makes the poem read. I think you have written this poem most wonderfully. Great work. Really glad i managed to happen across this poem.
Laura.
- luckynsincere
  December 23, 2008
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  thanks so much Laura. I truly appreciate your kind comment
Lexie -
October 30, 2008

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Well
The depth and metaphor here are incredibly expressed, was this supposed to be challenging?
you made it look like a stroll in the park, what an incredible piece of brilliance
Ktulu Blackwolfe
October 29, 2008

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Mel,

you have shere beauty in your words here. i was left pondering after reading this so i say you rose to the challenge and conquered that...Well done.

**Ktulu Blackwolfe**
Immortal Obscurity
October 28, 2008

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Wow, this is definitely a difficult form; but you have proven your ability to rise to the challenge. I particularly liked this bit:

"There: scars and lies,
just hear my cries."

It just stood out to me; don't know why, but it did.

Your font and background also fit perfectly with the picture. Your lettering-choice seemed to faintly resemble the snow on the tree in your picture-prompt. Winter is one of my favourite seasons, and you have captured its beauty [and yours] in this simple, yet stunning poem.

Your scores will be revealed at the culmination of the contest.

Brava!

Laura
Arkbear
October 28, 2008
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Lovely words from a lovely person......

**with one true mate.

Where the lone ends

true love begins.**

....gorgeous penning Poptart

Just love your font....picture is serene.....your thoughts fit it perfectly.....good luck and God bless!

Bear ~
Ceridwens Soul
October 27, 2008

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I apologise (a little) for the 5 letter word limit but you yourself gave me the idea so not entirely us who are to blame. You however rose to the challenge like a trooper to produce a blinding minute form poem where each word counts.

You have made canny use of trochaic substitution in the opening lines of stanzas 1 and 3, which I haven't seen done successfully in minute till now. Awesome.

All in all a stunning piece.

Blessed be

Jem

Scores will be revealed after judging is over,
LadyDementia
October 27, 2008

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You have done really well! I bet it took a few times to get words with 5 letters or less, not something you really think about is it. A superb write, beat of luck hunni
- luckynsincere
  October 27, 2008
  
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  It was so tough. Even after I cut and pasted it on the poem page I found like 4 more words that had to be replaced hehaha
  
  but it was truly a fun challenge It felt great to be challenged!
  
  Mel
- - LadyDementia
    October 31, 2008
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    Challenges always feel good when completed...its the doing that's the horrid bit I do love this you've written tho! Beautiful poem
SomethingLovely
October 24, 2008
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GLad you like the pic, it's actually from an informational website about global warming, and it's a fav of mine... =) I thought it would be a nice twist to have you be inspired to self-describe through a season... =) Good luck, and I look forward to your write. And don't worry, you're brilliant, just take your time and deep breaths and remember... you can conquer whatever you wish...
LadyDementia
October 23, 2008
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Love the pic No more than 5 letters in a word?? Wow, gonna need your thinking cap on Can't wait to see what your quill spills
Ceridwens Soul
October 22, 2008
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Don't scream... too loud
Image: http://i223.photobucket.com/albums/dd9/clutzycara/SnowBeech.jpg

Prompt: Self - description

Form: Minute Poetry

Restrictions: No words containing more than 5 letters

good luck
- luckynsincere
  October 22, 2008
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  but the image, I must say is LOVELY!!!
- luckynsincere
  October 22, 2008
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  omg! No words over 5 letters... you all are just plain out mean!! dang... you guys know how I am about the word play
  
  Thanks... will begin my task
- - tomisb
    October 23, 2008
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    Do not let them keep you from the glory of touch and other senses. Dance. laugh be all the gifts you are.
    Love, Tom B.
  - Ceridwens Soul
    October 22, 2008
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    grins bit of an epeolatrist like me are ya??
    
    ha ha