Its pathetic,really
Ridiculous,silly
The thought of you
Still captivates me
And after so long
That song prolonged
Still so strong, murmuring in my mind
Finding my soft spots
pots of sensitivity,Shots of sensuality
What must i do
to have you?
Truly taken back
By my lack of resistance
Persistence
Existence of this.
Infatuation, Frustration,realization
its you i want.
You that haunts me
Yet it can't be love see
Just a slight shove of..
Blight curiosity?
Pursuing me, undoing me.
Why? is it a shock to see you?
Face flushed
Pulse rushed
Mind hushed.
When your reflected in my eyes
Dissecting my disguise
When your all that lyes
Animate
in a hall of 300.
What is this second of bliss,kissing my temple
So simple,easy
for you to please me,seize,see
right through to the clues no one else can find.
Due to my mental armor
Flashed back to packed halls
hauling my stalled stare away
fair to say, that silence was deafening
Letting me think,clearly
Revived i continue weaving through the crowd.
You walk right by me
most likely
Without a second of thought.
Author notes
The title has two meanings.
1- Love
A contest entry
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Comments
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Great
This reads like spoken word which is awesome to me. It is very emotional to say the least I LOVE this part:
Infatuation, Frustration,realization
its you i want.
You that haunts me
Yet it can't be love see
Just a slight shove of..
Blight curiosity?
Pursuing me, undoing me.
Why? is it a shock to see you?
Thats the question because everytime I see my ex its like "Wow there he is, right there...should I say something or just say nothing" Wow great job, thanks for entering and good luck!
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I loved it! The ideas seemed almost too quick to capture and too prominent to ignore. I think you have captured what you were aiming for well and I commend you for your efforts. Cheers
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wow
This was a very hearfelt write... I can tell you have wrote this straight from the heart... keep up the grea twork and good luck in my contest!!!
Shannon*Leah -
wow...that was great flow, yet at the same time had a sort of...beat to it, that hammered out your thoughts.
Smile♫
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Great flow, make you run right along like a song written so well...nicely creative and interesting...thank you for entering.
mystic -
very interesting. Thanks for sharing this nicely written poem. And thanks for entering it into my contest. I like this poem a whole lot.
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FRIGGIN AWESOME!!! i loved the internal and external rhyming scheme ... i loved the love expressed and the way in which it was ... this piece is a winner ... so good luck in them contests!!! ...
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