she treads softly, unsuspectingly
her trap rides my emotions
without reign
she masters my awe, but my
spirit remains my own
for as long as I feign control
fearlessly she wraps feeling
like mist around my soul,
trapping my senses
I am now an invalid,
breathing life, but without me,
as I too have become a fallen angel
Author notes
Picture: http://www.ethnicarts.org/nss-folder/pictureslibrary/pearl%20goddess.JPG
"The itsy bitsy spider climbed up the water spout"
A contest entry
- My first contest :) Loads of Options, Allowing Pre-writes. Come in and see:D by Ylova.
700 points, ended November 5, 2008, 57 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - November Rounds by CitrineSunrise.
700 points, ended November 12, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - birth of love by rosepoet.
400 points, ended November 19, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
1 - 12 of 12
-
This is a very powerful short poem that tells a complete story. I enjoyed the wording and the feeling created. The picture adds to the complete work. I look forward to your entry in the next round. Peace, Liz
-
I didn't believe in "fallen angels" until one fell in my lap and she's done everything your angel did to you. I love the presentation here and wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
-
Interesting! LOL!
Surprising imagery and excellent wording! Great piece of art, as well! Very good work! Good luck in the contest, friend!
-
good luck in the contest
love always
xx -
So Beautiful.
Well my friend you have captured the fall of an angel quite lovely in your amazing imagery. Fallen angels do tend to make us fall too when emotions are involved. A wonderful take on the picture. A pleasure to read this morning. So deserves a trophy. Simply Beautiful!!!! Take care.
Peace and Grace,
Sandy
-
Beautiful poem with a great flow and imagery. Nice take on the prompt. Please put in "the itsy bitsy spider climbed up the water spout" in your AN. If you've read the entire contest page, you'll know why I want it there
Thank you for your entry and good luck 
-
How you portray the power of a personality to render one powerless by their influence, and manipulation...Cleverly you have penned this...imagery ....A choice of words, and masterful write!
-
Just Wonderful
Wow I love this poem. Oh the alluring of love. Your poem flows just wonderfully and the imagery is just great. You show great emotions as well in your write here. Best wishes in the contest, Frans...
Wishing You Many Blessings,
Much Love,
Kelle Marie
-
Ah, Frans, the words wrap themselves
around the image, transforming it,
giving it voice...
Aesthete
-
Ahhh the spiral of being lured in and captured. Very nicely done. I enjoyed the imagery here so much. ~Pamela
-
Irresistable force meets immoveable object lol that's what love is sometimes..one need to control another, when together is just becomes beautiful. C
-
Brilliant take on the prompt!
I see the surge of irresistible sensuality in the artwork, and you captured the essence in phrasings with a timbre of its own. Well done, Frans!
Love
Myra
Adding your comment:
1 - 12 of 12
