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my rescue

 

Spilled out onto the pavement

of broken dreams and heartache's anthem,

it was you who rescued me.

I was speechless when you reached for me,

even though I was glad you came.

 

A heart's longing for one to rescue

and darling, here you came.

From the depths of shattered pieces

and eyes full of waterfalls,

nothing could have made me happier

than to see me in your arms.

 

And all along, I knew it.

I had this feeling

we were meant to be.

 

 

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Option 10: A happy poem. What makes you happy. Most of all. Something that just makes you really smile. Could be objects, could be people, could be other peoples feelings?

Something about me, specifically as a poet, is that I don't have one defined writing style. And I don't write about just one topic either. I write about many things.

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  • Ms.Daydream
    February 2

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    That is so sweet, the perfect love story!
    I really liked it when you said your emotions were scattered on the pavement in broken pieces, it just shows how depressed you are and how the boy who saved is more heroic. That was really touching with a lot of vivid imagery. =)
    Good luck in the contest! =D


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    January 5
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    this is beautiful!


  • Jaffa-
    November 19, 2008

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    This made me so happy. It starts of a bit sad and then there is actually hope at the end of the tunnle. It's an amazing write and i really loved it.
    'A heart's longing for one to rescue

    and darling, here you came.

    From the depths of shattered pieces

    and eyes full of waterfalls,'
    This part was my favourite.
    I loved the flow, it was really beautiful. Such a meaningful write. Good luck in the contests xoxo


  • Symphony
    November 14, 2008

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    Oh My God. This sent shivering tingles down my spine - I'm speechless for words to say, as it also brought tears to my eyes even though I'm not too sure as to [i]why[/i] ...

    I think, perhaps, it's because you didn't try to overdo it ; you wrote it, so beautifully, so brilliantly - so HEROICALLY - but didn't try to be too cliche [as is the pit that i usually land in!] or over do it and make it too long ... Seriously, I just loved this


  • januaryrain gold member
    November 1, 2008

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    Beautiful,
    From the depths of shattered pieces
    and eyes full of waterfalls,

    It's just beautiful, I love it.


  • she still smiles x gold member
    October 29, 2008

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    Awww
    This was so beautifully written. To know that the one you are in love with was meant for you is such an amazing & indescribable feeling, but you penned it very vividly and wonderfully.
    I am glad you have found someone that you can share such happiness with<3


  • Blue Spirit
    October 23, 2008

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    this piece is full of emotions. i like this, man, especially the first three lines which read:

    Spilled out onto the pavement
    of broken dreams and heartache's anthem,
    it was you who rescued me.

    Thanks for sharing.



  • offlimits
    October 22, 2008

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    OMG i love it it is full of emotion and i thought of my boyfriend and myself the whole time it was such and adorable write...
    thank you so much for sharing
    well done on a marvellous write.


  • Kiss the girl--x
    October 22, 2008

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    'Spilled out onto the pavement
    of broken dreams and heartache's anthem,
    it was you who rescued me.'

    those first three lines captivated me, the last three lines left me feeling sad. but this was so so beautiful.
    as always.



    ♥


  • HiddenByTheDark
    October 22, 2008

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    awww this is a cute poem that makes it sound like true first love.. with the butterflies and everything. I loved the last line. Keep penning

    ♥always Kate
    P.S. the backgroung was good too easy to read
    and very fun

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