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Impossible dream

Her conspicuous breast
and curved submission
arrests my consideration
I can only ponder,
what else does stir
my thoughts I wonder?.

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  • Denerica
    December 17, 2008
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    Definately leave things to the imagination in just a short write.

    • Tercarro
      December 19, 2008
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      Thank you

      I must thank you for reading so much of my work, I am grateful and flattered.
      TC


  • Gulfbreeze
    November 20, 2008

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    This is very good. You captured the picture well, in such few lines..."arrests my consideration" great line.

    • Tercarro
      December 19, 2008
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      Gratitude to you

      I so welcome your comments and thank you for them.
      TC


  • IrishGypsyRose silver member
    November 17, 2008
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    Fantastic!

    I like the thoughts this piece provoked. It left me wondering and wanting more. Great write.


  • apropos
    October 30, 2008

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    very good. you magage to encapsulate quite a few different concepts into those few words. Excellent!

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