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As your lips meet mine..

As I glance onto your face,
And see those sparkling eyes,
Time has lost its pace,
And the world's just standing by...

As the raindrop feels your cheeks,
And it slides down to your lips,
As if I forgot how to speak,
Oh how I envy those drips !

I feel the chills shooting inside,
I wanna feel you in my arms,
Watching the raindrops slide,
As I'm holding your palm..

Your touch sends me flying,
With your fragrance in the winds,
To reach your lips I'm dying,
I wanna feel your skin..

As I'm brushing though your hair, and your lips are closing mine,
When they meet and get locked, it feels soo right !
I want to freeze this time forever, wanna live this moment devine,
Wanna feel your lips forever, in this exquisite night...

A contest entry

I've tried to make the feelings as descriptive as I could and would appreciate any one's words on it ...

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  • GodsRebelChild
    October 23, 2008
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    good job loved it


  • Bohemianwriter
    October 22, 2008

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    omg why are you doing this to me!!! this was soooooo beautiful!!!!....aaaaaaaarhh!!!!!!
    THANKS FOR ENTERING!
    AND GOOD LUCK!!