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the lives and times of here and now

 
Shooting doves from a 9mm,
giving peace a chance.
Adopting smiles and sugar-free gum
instead of nicotine cigarettes.
I'll wait for newspapers to become unbiased
before I invest in their texts.
 
Love gave me its handshake and
it's on my side.
I couldn't ask for a better queen,
even if I had to rewind life.

 

 

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  • bookwrm1324
    January 6

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    i absolutely love this. the line "adopting smiles and sugar-free gum instead of nicotine cigarettes" is very cute yet very true and almost sad at second thought. i love that line. the only thing i would say is that the second stanza seems to get a little off topic but besides that its very well written. fabulous job


  • RT KatPat
    December 11, 2008
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    And i forgot to mention
    the title is PERFECT!

  • RT KatPat
    December 11, 2008

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    I usually dont get modern poetry, and am sure I did'nt really get this one completely either.. but i loved the medley of issues... almost as if i was getting a live telecast on your thought process...

  • vampedvixen
    December 9, 2008

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    I love the back and forth motion of this poem, like everything you say.. you also in a way unsay in the next line. It ties in with the title, I believe, because these really are the lives and times of the here and now.. this is what reality is like in this present day. I also liked the lines "I'll wait for newspapers to become unbiased before I invest in their texts." lol.. this is so true, the media is so biased. Some day I would like to be able to be given the truth in a way that is unbiased and you know.. true?

  • ElectricBloom
    November 23, 2008

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    Very interesting.
    A short poem, but there's so much to get from it!
    Fantastic imagey and metaphor, I wish I could pick a few of my favorite lines - but copying and pasting the whole poems seems silly!
    I love what you've said about newspapers, I feel that way too!

    ElectricBloom


  • DarkTears
    November 22, 2008

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    Interesting...

    I really like the last two lines...and changing the cigaretes part is also nice...Interesing way of puttig it. But, my most favorite line was "giving peace a chance." I do not why but tht piece is stuck in my mind,,,i really like it, truly.

  • Angelshadow
    November 17, 2008
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    Nice style..if a tad weirdish.
    Cool though.

  • michaeline
    November 9, 2008

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    This is pretty good writing although I feel that the lines do not really play all together in a clear statement except to say that they are kind of abstract and not really connected to one another.But I like what you had to say I would only wish that you showed how they all interconnect together in more detail.I love what you say only would like to read more on this poem and I feel you should express more in it.I do like it though.


  • Scyphon
    November 5, 2008

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    Great poem, I hope one day we can have good newspapers too. Im tired of all the worlds problems... especially bc we never seem to fix, just ruin.


  • tortured-heart
    October 31, 2008

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    there's something about this one...i don't know what it is....but it gives me good shivers....
    peace, love, & cheese


  • DolceVito gold member
    October 26, 2008

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    Good write

    ....great metaphors here...short with far-reaching implications

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