caught in her eyes sobs scream and shout:
leave me alone ... no let me out!
yet
behind her smile soft solicit sighs:
help me ! and please go away !
then
in urgent address heart put to the test:
this is no play ... please stay!
two lovers flee imprisoned by fear
ran in despair from hatred and tear
manon lescaut tenderly put to rest
lusianafree, released from the test
her lover alive continued his strife
jailed by love and yearning for life
Author notes
The itsy bitsy etc. ... GRIN
Prompt: 2d.] http://skeptisys.files.wordpress.com/2008/05/manon-lescaut-b.jpg
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Comments
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This is rough love you lost the beat
manon lescaut was put to rest 8
"lusiana" free, but the bayous tes10t
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Such a great write! I loved the take on the prompt! And yay! You put in the itsy bitsy spider bit as well..Hahah. So far, I've had to tell a lot of people to do the same. Thank you for follwing the rules and once again. Awesome write! Thank you for entering and good luck.
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I swoon at your feet, and I agree with donnz. This is a magnificent write. I found myself ‘jumping’ from subject to subject, falling deeper and deeper into emotions that I would like to escape from – not necessarily my own, but from that which emanates from others. More said, would expose my ignorance. Frans
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excellent / as always
"An original writer is not one who imitates nobody, but one whom nobody can imitate."
~ Chateaubriand, Le Génie du Christianisme, 1802
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