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Under the Fig Tree

 

 

 

I hear desert wind whisper through the trees

“Shahrazad, Shahrazad, return please” 

 

Peacocks serenade somewhere out of sight

As we nestle close to the fire bright

 

Your scent, sweet jasmine, takes my breath away

As I hold you in a desiring way

 

And when dawn breaks, on ripe figs we will dine

Basking in our love, so very divine.

 

The moon bides its time till sun again dips

When I hold you close and taste of your lips.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Author notes

Prompt #5 5.) Pen me something beautiful filled with love and passion and sensuality.


"the itsy bitsy spider climbed up the water spout"

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  • Alyzeh
    November 16, 2008

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    Such wonderful words, that painted a lovely picture in my mind! I absolutely loved this. You were right! Haha.

    A great write and congratulations on winning the shiny. Well deserved. I knew Ylova would love it. I could've easily predicted the winners.

    Cheers!
    Alyzeh


  • maktub
    October 30, 2008
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    Stunning....beautiful...I am truly awed.
    Smile♫


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 28, 2008

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    You once again pen such romantic words that captivate the reader! It played out in my mind!



    (gosh.. sorry I'm so far behind MJ!)




  • chilali
    October 23, 2008

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    Great write!! Thank you so much for entering and good luck You forgot to mention "the itsy bitsy spider climbed up the water spout" in your AN btw


  • Nangaleema
    October 23, 2008

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    ahhhh the imagery of this transported me.
    and the rhythm and rhyme are subtle - they flow well. lovely, sensual read. - NANGALEEMA


  • tara wilson gold member
    October 22, 2008
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    this is so beautiful - I would maybe take the s off dawn. not sure.

    enjoyed this=)


  • fortyninereasons gold member
    October 22, 2008

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    I see that being alone gives time to write such beautiful words.

    Juls


  • Nicolette gold member
    October 22, 2008

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    Indeed love, romance, passion and sensuality here and beautiful visuals too... made me think of an oasis and caravans in the desert (and i simply love deserts). What a fragrant scene you've painted here!

    ~ Nicolette


  • myrataal silver member
    October 22, 2008

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    Wonderful and musical ...

    and good use of sound devices -- assonance, alliteration, onomatopoeia. I especially loved the second line and its beautiful imitation of the wind. A beautiful poem. Well done.

    Myra


    • MJ Donnelly gold member
      October 22, 2008
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      Thank you Myra, I'm afraid this was one of my hasty endeavors in the wee hours, but none the less I've made the corrections and thanks again dear.


      mj.


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    October 22, 2008

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    Your words are most definitely beautiful, as always and filled with the love, passion and sensuality required by the prompt.

    I got lost somewhere between serenading peacocks and the scent of jasmine and by the final line you'd taken my breath away.

    My best wishes to you in the contest dear

    Love Margaret


  • Leonura
    October 22, 2008
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    Romance in every word. A truly beautiful poem. somethin' any women would sigh over.

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