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Bedtime!

Missing image

oh mummy you do spoil me
i love you oh so much
you cuddle me and kiss me
i love to feel your touch,


but mummy do you have to
kiss me on the head?
you make my head all sticky
just before i go to bed!

each morning when I see you
and the sun is shining bright
my head is still soaking wet
from the kiss I got last night!

 

 

 

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Option #6

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  • nasirj
    February 26

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    Awwwwwwwwwwww

    Miss caraid

    that was sweet
    and made me think
    about my mommy and grandma
    and how they do that to me
    I can really relate to this poem


    Cainaan

  • Bazza silver member
    November 19, 2008

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    Ha ha ha ... reminds me of my sweet ole granma, but at least they save money not buying Brylcream.
    Bazza



  • Timeless Wisdom silver member
    November 14, 2008

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    Cute I love your overall structure and rhyme scheme. This is important in poetry in order to set a flow that helps the mood of the writing. You did very nicely here..

    ASM
    AKA Raymond

  • Ahkam silver member
    November 14, 2008

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    Beautiful

    I wonder How i missed such an interisting piece, I thought I have read this before.How nicely you have mixed the simplicity with humor.how very innocent and sweet. A very cute poem indeed. thanks for sharing Giminy


  • Cyber Artist Moderators member
    November 4, 2008
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    congratulations well done von

  • Legend silver member
    November 3, 2008
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    Well done Von enjoyed it first time of reading and even more so now i have returned to congratulate you on your trophy
    Excellent

  • AnnD Moderators member
    November 3, 2008

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    Ha ha ha oh Von, this so made me smile.
    I can almost hear that baby giraffe saying that to its mother. and such a cute image too. you have caught it so well in your poem. I love it, thankyou.


    • rufina caraid gold member
      November 3, 2008
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      Thank You Ann - it does me good to get out of my 'box' now and then. It was a great contest/s - Congratulations to everyone. Von

  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    October 29, 2008

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    Oh this is just too gorgeous! It fits the picture perfectly. I can just see that little one saying these words
    Wonderful flow and rhyme too!
    All the best with this
    Gaylene


  • rbruce gold member
    October 22, 2008

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    ROFL. I can imagine the feeling of wet licks in the morning. Yucky indeed. Very nice happy take on the picture prompt. A beauty.

  • Trew
    October 22, 2008
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    awww!
    so cute

  • Cyber Artist Moderators member
    October 22, 2008

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    ROLFLOL Nice one Von all that sticky salver I wonder if Giraffes get Cow licks well done best of luck
    Cyber (Paul)


  • Legend silver member
    October 22, 2008

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    Dear Von a wonderful little poem to go with the imageThey do draw out some excellent works, these pictures All the very best in the contest

    L

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