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Memories Holding On...-

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lonely,

looking longingly

outside.

 

leaning into the

cold hard hazy rippled glass

of bitter calloused veracity.

 

love gone,

perplexingly pulled ,

without pity,

cruel portentous platitudes.

 

naught seemingly survives.

 

there were times …

 

when we warmly welcomed sensual

tender thoughtful love.

 

where caring was everything.

 

today,

 

my faint memories

precariously bridge

 

emptiness…

 

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Memories Holding On…

Wandika 10-27-2008

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  • Skybow silver member
    October 28, 2008

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    I don't think after writing this lovely piece you can say you are "not good at freewrites". This proves you wrong.


    • Wandika gold member
      October 29, 2008
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      How nice of you to say so

      I really try but this is difficult for me.
      Thank you.

      Jim


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    October 28, 2008

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    There truly are memories holding on here, gripping the hand held between lonely. Beautifully executed free verse that blends style from a practiced hand.

    Imagery is beautifully creative in portentous platitudes, hazy rippled glass and precarious bridges. Wonderful use of alliteration to mark spaces and punctuation moments.

    Well done to image and word prompts. A pleasure to read and enjoy. Thank you for entering this gem in my contest. Best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela

    • Wandika gold member
      October 28, 2008
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      You are too kind Pam.

      Thank you for your encouragement.

      Jim


  • Patpowers silver member
    October 22, 2008

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    What a sad write here Jim. I am touched by this work of yours. I enjoy your work as always and this was one of your best. Thanks again my friend.

    • Wandika gold member
      October 22, 2008
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      Glad you liked it Pat

      Not good at free writes.

      Jim


  • Legend silver member
    October 22, 2008

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    My dear friend it seem that i am reading sad works from you of late , or maybe it just seems that way.
    It is always a pleasure to read any words you lay down Jeez some fine words here this uneducated brain is left reaching for the dictionary ( yep I really am word unwise) I tend to blag being intelligent (and i get away with it)
    Excellent my friend good luck in the contest

    • Wandika gold member
      October 22, 2008
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      I am fine my friend

      Not very good at freewrites but try now and again.

      Jim

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