he got home's guitar
she went to get her, just birthed ~
man helped baby feed
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revised from :
he got the guitar
she went to get child, home birthed ~
newborn's feeding's helped
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The storyline of thie piece is a little confusing...
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cre8tiv writer thanks for verification of my returning to edit
I did try to enhance the image tones one after another.
the first strikes the chord of domestic instrument that soothes from husband guy to someone else from across his chest area -- then mother having delivered a daughter to their bedroom, goes to lift infant -- for powerful reorienting to perception of 'man helps baby feed;' since his holding and making music assisted mamma nurse, sort of in sympathetic position of each song!
I'm sorry I didn't straighten it in time, yet I loved trying to construct such for this dual interest or aha in taste and nurturing value!!!
called Carolyn
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