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Rapture

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The look on her face was rapture,
when she heard flamenco guitar
in the jazz song playing.

Slowly she began to dance,
subtly moving her body in
ancient rhythms...
moving down her arms
to her white-bird hands,
describing arabesques.

Tight red dress accenting
the lines she was creating,
that mirrored the music,
as a work of art.

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Contest entry: tuesday morning by fingertips.

photo credit: http://rilrae.deviantart.com/art/Dance-22803471

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  • poetrandy
    November 21, 2008

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    WOW!

    Just a beautiful poem, filled with a superb metaphor and images that reveal truth, beauty and perhaps your own feelings or interpretations! I just really love this poem! This is a masterwork and masterpiece!


    • Skybow silver member
      November 21, 2008
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      You are too kind, thank you so much for your comment. It was a real moment and my real feelings. For me a personal story makes the write stronger.


  • Draig aine gold member
    November 7, 2008

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    thumbs up

    I can hear the melody, feel her hips moving, seduced by the whole scene, my highest praise shivers my friend


    • Skybow silver member
      November 7, 2008
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      I wish you'd have been there with me. It was a magical moment and I'm sure you would have had your muse stirred by the scene I witnessed and reported here.

      Thank you for your kind words.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    October 26, 2008

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    This is a lovely take on the photograph you chose. Completely different to all the other entries and that is always a good thing. I shall be handing all the poems to Necip tomorrow morning.
    Thank-you for the entry!


    • Skybow silver member
      October 26, 2008
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      Thank you for your kind words. I appreciate that you liked my poem, your good opinion means a lot to me.


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    October 22, 2008

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    That is some kite. Beautifully descriptive my friend. A pleasure to read and enjoy. ~Pamela


    • Skybow silver member
      October 22, 2008

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      Thank you Pamela, I took some poetic liberties with the choose another bird prompt, I know that, but it was the poem that came to me.


      • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
        October 22, 2008
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        Those are always the best ones. They stand alone and need no image or prompt to take meaning. That means, they can go anywhere. That is a good thing.

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