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Life Hastened

 

 

 

 

 

I like to think that

I capitalized on

the hurried

misspent years

of my youth

 

making things up

as I went along

 

chances flittered

to the winds

only to come to rest

 

like so much

confetti

trampled underfoot

 

after a parade.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • mbm
    October 30, 2008

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    equilibrium/quill

    the first stanza seems to come from experience that resonates for not just a sentence about it but a thesis coming to head now, like a miscarriage could have lead one to rectifiable cause and effect because demarcated lifestyle for love doesn't work as continuum of welcome, so now vital with essence stored... the core echoing Ecclesiastes 12:1 from a strobe of become...

    the ending reminds me how we might get discouraged when we're within exaggeration. our happen isnt the highest should but simultaneous or out of care ~

    yet we can be looking to notbeing lax to just skill,
    called Carolyn


  • notorious gold member
    October 27, 2008

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    Okay, so liking how this begins with "I like to think that"--in just one line, you made an atmosphere I could fall into and relate to.

    "misspent years
    of my youth"
    Oh god, am I spending my years wrongly?
    Love the word 'misspent', don't see it often.

    And you know...
    this is put together seemingly effortlessly; the flow is easy and natural and it's just well-written without being self-conscious of metaphors or other pretentious crap.

    Nice.

    Good luck
    ,
    Jessica

    PS: Salt and pepper chips; you tried 'em yet?

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    October 25, 2008
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    I really enjoyed this -

    it was simple but so wonderfully done.

    Excellent.


  • divebar
    October 25, 2008
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    beautifully simple.


  • Nangaleema
    October 23, 2008

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    i enjoyed the sentiment of this poem and the way it was expressed. the analogy of confetti was neat.
    this being the third poem of yours i have read, i am appreciating the variety of your subject matter and composition. looking forward to reading more. - NANGALEEMA


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    October 22, 2008

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    Have you noticed that as we grow older there are some things where we slow down the pace at which we live our lives but on the other hand there are times when we're in such a hurry to cram in as much as possible in the time remaining? I don't think we ever really get the timing right.

    I guess all we can do is as you say and make things up as we go along.

    Best wishes in the contest dear

    Love Margaret


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 22, 2008

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    Yes indeed, we do live and learn! I can imagine your youth was full excitement and perhaps a little mispent but was the stamping ground that made you into the wonderful man you are today!

    Love this write!

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