She takes her lovers as they are
With all their flaws and sneers
And all their petty irritations
Here snoring next to her
A killer on the loose
Sleepy drool runs down his cheek
Carnage swimming in his dreams
Armed and dangerous.
God help her
She loves him so,
This monster in her bed.
Author notes
Addiction to rough trade, sick passions and an unrequited love for leather jackets and switchblade knives.
A contest entry
- Lotsa Options.. Come and see!!! by FightOffYourDemons.
550 points, ended December 8, 2008, 35 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Finish Strong by TabbyCat.
700 points, ended November 20, 2008, 58 entries
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Okay i change my mind kind of, on second reading I like it a lot more. I don't know if you changed it or if I am just seeing in a different way but I really like it.
lol, sorry for being a tard
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What a scary thought...but even axe murderers probably had woman who loved them...
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A lot of girls seem to be attracted to bad boys, maybe I should shave my head and get a few tattoos. Than maybe I'll have some luck in the lady department. Your poem reminds me of a girl I knew who chased after bad boys. It could do with some revising for sure to give it more edginess. Good luck in contest.
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very nice
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I really like this, it had a very strong beginning. Although there was a slow middle the end was very well written as well, with some work the middle could work out better but it is still pretty fantastic.
Your author's note I loved. very catchy!
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