You touched the very fibers of my essence
I spoke,
"I have yet to begin,
to put a spark in your eye,
a smile upon your lips,
a glow in your heart,
and a fire down below"
You wept tears of joy and love
then asked jokingly,
"Can I get that in writting,
carved in stone?"
SO I DID
upon a ten pound slate
hammer and chisel
blood and tears
You wept more,
touched as you have never known before.
Our next fight,
I handed it to you,
as a reminder,
a peace offering,
make love not war.
You shattered it
and
me.
so -
FUCK YOU, YOU UNWORTHY WHORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author notes
damn I feel so much better
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1200 points, ended November 28, 2008, 32 entries
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Comments
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Whoa!!!!!
I'll be careful with this one. This is so different for you in free verse. It is true 'emote'. I've done a few dark ones, myself. I'm glad you got it out of your system and bled it into a poem. The pain of love and relationships breaks us down more than anything.
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Yes it certainly does Otter. Thanks for your commentary and have a groovy day.
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I loved this .exactly what i wanted and theres a story too.i love it! the ending was perfect!
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thanks for offering a place to vent
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The feeling of hopelessness I can relate to as I have felt it many times before. I think it is good to get your feelings out and this is a good poem.
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Oh boy! That's some venting there... sometimes exactly what we need to do!!
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indeed it is
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