You were the Supernova girl.
We called you our little comet,
Because you came in a whirl,
Charming everyone you met.
We called you our little comet –
You were rare and amazing,
Charming everyone you met
In anticipation of hell-raising.
You were rare and amazing,
A flash of light in the dark.
In anticipation of hell-raising,
You started by stealing our hearts.
A flash of light in the dark,
A speck of perfection in an imperfect world,
You started and ended by stealing our hearts.
You were the Supernova girl
Author notes
This is a pantoum I wrote for my niece, who came and went in three weeks.
A contest entry
- PROUDLY PRESENTING: ROUND 3 by Walk-Free.
1900 points, ended October 31, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - loosing a loved one by karas.
400 points, ended November 25, 2008, 46 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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whoa
i love this write so much. its so different and unique in its own way. its very creative, and the emotion behind your words were also very raw. i really liked this poem, and i'm sorry about your loss. keep the faith alive, and i'm sure things will get better soon!
best wishes.
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An interesting form which I have never come across but I loved the creativity. I am sorry about the loss but I am sure things will get better with time. 
This draft is nice and sweet in itself. It has a feeling of hope somehow.
Good luck in the contest!!
loveees,
transit~
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username please, hon.
thanks
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it's heartbreaking to her the about your niece.
this poem really showed how you moved on and focus now instead of how she was such a joy in those 3 weeks.
wow. i felt this "pantoum" was kinda interesting. an ABAB rhyming pattern with the 4th line repeated in the 3rd line of the next stanza.
could you give me a fuller definition of this? i'd appreciate learning something new (:
good job and all the best
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