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Gone

I sit here all alone,

hands shaking steadily.

My tears littered below,

as the pain weighs heavily.

 

In my head doubt pours,

upon my heart mainly fear.

Blood rushes to my fingers,

as sad songs are all I hear.

 

One after another they appear,

like a grand parade of sorrows.

They march into my broken soul,

I scream with the pain that follows.

 

Lowering to meet tear stained pillows,

wondering if I shall see another dawn.

Curious to know how long it shall take,

before they notice i'm simply too far gone.

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  • Doom Fridge
    April 3
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    sweet

  • I absoutely loved it

    this sounds like something I would write. great job well done indeed

  • True feelin of a drowing heart......


  • LoveNeverDies.
    February 15
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    Simply Heart-felt!!!

    Such emotions rise

    your really good


  • Sadpuppet
    November 12, 2008
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    I like this. You have a fine talent for writing these kinds of things.

  • Axcess Denied
    November 3, 2008

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    deep

    Short and sweet, well maybe not so sweet, but very very good nonetheless. ITs been too long since Ive visited you here, and Im glad I stopped to read your newest edition. I love it, of course. But I love EVERYTHING you write, so whats new? lol Keep addin kiddo, and don't be afraid to say hi to me on myspace, ya know. Hey Ry, RING RING! Remember?


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    November 1, 2008

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    Oh
    I was crying by the end of this; how heartbreaking Ryan!


  • ChibberMonkey
    October 29, 2008

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    but its really well written.. minus your last 'to' which is missing its other 'o'.... poor thing.. must be missing its twin o. . .
    Ermm. yes. Did you peek into my heart to write this? Because seriously-- this is my heart right now in written form. for realsies. .


  • Samantha Marie
    October 23, 2008

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    oh be happy love~! i love this poem but i wish it had a happy ending...
    why did you write such a sad story???


  • muffkit
    October 22, 2008

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    Deep

    i loved it, most likely 'cause i could connect with it. The language is strong and moving, just be careful of the pace.


  • nightingale
    October 22, 2008

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    RYAN!

    where on earth has this heartbreaking, wonderfully sorrowful piece come from? amazingly tragic. hope everything is ok...you know you can talk to me. :-(


    • Ryan gold member
      October 22, 2008
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      Ana :(

      I know darlin' I just find it so much easier to write. Rather then be stared at while I talk of pain. Not to mention my damn phone is still broke! FML! lol

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