She runs away from everything she had
Run baby run here comes your hateful dad
Don't let him catch you for you know what comes next
The pain and the hurt wrongly thrusted upon your neck
She screams and cries but mommy won't hear
All with open ears just mentally unaware
That you have done nothing wrong
And innocent blood will be spilt upon this home
He is gaining pace with that deviled stare
You cry for help while no one cares
You gain the speed to get away
But there he is only 3 steps away
Hurry hurry almost there
Freedom insight, he can't get you there
You get the door open hooray
But he got your arm and with no delay
Pulls his daughter back into play
These sick games that portray
His masculine strength in every way
He beats this young woman to the ground
With hopeless obedience this she allows
No scream or holler come from her mouth
For she knows with that comes more and more ouch
He beats her face with closed fists
Even this she does not resist
He kicks her once, twice, and several more
Until he decides he wants more
Picks her up and tears her clothes
Shamefully standing with nothing to hold
He hurts her now in a new form of way
He takes her gift while she prays
To a God who seems to just turn away
This theft even she can not accept
And with little luck she turns to attack
But he beats her down and does it again
Now she wheeps for it all to end
Wish granted when beat across the head
Later she awakes wishing she had not
For she knows a dream this was not
She tries to cry herself to sleep
But with no luck she continues to weep
All while being quiet so he does not awake
For this was a good day luckily her life he did not take
She now decides it is to much
For happiness is to distant to touch
So with this knife and pouring drain
She killed herself and drowned in shame
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Extremely powerful
Some of this didn't quite sound right for flow BUT it didn't matter it was very raw, powerful, and "seeable" 3 applauds to you
wonderful poem yet very sad.
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omgosh!
this is dark!
yet it was so beautiful, in its own way 
your imagery here was so raw, and it was powerful, your words were strong and deep. keep writing liked it very very much 
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spelling corrections:
stanza 2: line 7: "hurray"=Hooray line 10: "potray"= Portray
stanza 3: line 3: "hollar"= holler, line 4: "owch"= ouch, line 5: "beets"= beats
stanza 4: line 9: "weeps"= wheeps
stanza 5: line 4: "weeps"= wheeps, line 5: "quite"= quiet, line 8: "Hapiness"= happiness
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... that's... dark... and kinda sad... but it was still a pretty good poem, although there are a few spelling errors that you may want to fix, to make it an even more effective read. ^^ great job ^^
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Outstanding
This is a strong poem that makes you realise just how evil some people can be. You made it very real with a vivid use of language and strong description. It is so sad that people have to suffer in this way and this poem highlights a problem that affects many peoples lives. The rhyme is strong and gave the poem added impact. Over all a great little poem.
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sad
definitely made me cry! i like the creative rhyming. Beet should be BEAT though. other than that, good job!
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Bone-chilling poem. Great job. It really made me feel something inside.
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