I look in a puddle and what do I see
Another girl's face staring at me
That's not my face, that's not my reflection
But this girl's face moves in the same direction
My face should be smiling, not torn in fear
I'm afraid to speak, worried what I might hear
I raise my hand and she does too
This can't be me! This can't be true!
I look close, trying to find my face,
But the one staring at me is all out of place
Have I changed this much? What have I done?
This face staring at me is devoid of fun
But what if I smile, to try something new,
Will she do the same? Will she follow through?
I smile real big, as far as my mouth will go,
She smiles too and its a smile I know,
It was me this whole time! I knew it was true!
Make sure that this never happens to you,
If you get lost and feel out of place,
Just make sure you remember your face,
This world is full of tricks and lies,
But even they can't break emotional ties,
Your face is yours and yours alone,
So make sure you remember it's your own,
Because your face is something you cannot lose,
Even though it's not yours to choose,
It's your face! Don't you forget,
Because life can be filled with some regret,
Just stay true and I hope you never have to chase,
Your identity, which is your face!
A contest entry
- Be that Smile in someone's life! by Tom The Invader.
625 points, ended November 21, 2008, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
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400 points, ended November 30, 2008, 67 entries
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Awesome message!
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great message, little steps are what it takes. A smile is a good start.
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This started out quite depressing, but you soon turned it around. Well done!
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nice
the most crucial thing when writing rhyming poetry is the rhythm. I don't mean iambic pentameter or that archaic concept--just that the lines match up.
it sometimes helps to keep the couplets, the two rhyming lines, the same length. Aside from that I thought it was awesome. -
Inspirational and pleasant.
Has deep meaning, and good flow.
Great write =]
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