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~ Paint Me ~

Paint me.

 

Allow your brush to dip in the valleys,

         and sway upon the hills -

 

Capture the light of my love as I whisper your name.

 

I am bound to your canvas;

  for I crave the tightness of your chains.

    Wrap me in the cascading hues of your fingertips

  whilst gently assaulting tempted thighs.

 

Paint me as woman.

 

Teach me the art of your perfection,

  by blinding me with the power to see.

        Show me the path of painful pleasure

       as I tremble upon your flesh.

 

Dabble a bit longer,

   to taste what you have made.

        Create me:

            as the image of shackled freedom.

 

Paint me as yours forevermore.

Author notes

I recently read a poem by a newer member here on our site, and it has inspired me to write this. I felt the freedom of being controlled when I read the poem, and wanted to convey that here.

Inspiration is poetry. Poetry is inspiration.

The poem that inspired me is: Alluring Complications by, highjinx

here is link to the poem that inspired this: http://allpoetry.com/poem/4639989

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Comments

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  • jmaslen
    June 9
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    very good

    I'm new to the site. Best poem I've read yet.

  • Beautiful

    This poem really sucked me into its beauty and imagery. It really displays a true bond between man and woman in a creative way that made me shiver. It's a poem that anyone can relate their own experience to and I really, really enjoyed it.


  • gllarso
    January 26

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    Very Inspiring!!

    Very sensual and beautiful, I love it. The idea of you being the canvas and being shackled to be set free, beautiful. Perfect as always.

    -Garrett

  • Bob Fox silver member
    December 8, 2008

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    Wow poet

    Creativity in the form of love making. Always a splendid adventure. The poet and the artist. What a fine combination I think. Excellent write.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    November 8, 2008

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    Wow, deep emotions here, simply wow....I see you have done the same thing you had us do Leaves a nice feeling after
    A stunning write, truly stunning!


  • highjinx
    November 4, 2008

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    I like your poem so much better. It's easy to see why everyone else loves it too. This is quite beautiful, and leaves much to the imagination. I am truly honoured you chose my poem for inspiration, though I can see so many places where I can improve it, thanks to your write.
    I wish you all the best in whatever you do,
    HJ

    • luckynsincere
      November 4, 2008
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      thank you so much for coming to read Your poem was truly amazing. I couldnt believe that you were new to the site... as you seemed to have been writing erotica forever...

      Thank you for being such an inspiration to me and so many others here on this site Keep writing!!

      Mel


  • Arabella
    October 26, 2008

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    Astounding

    This poem makes me shiver. I am enraptured by: the beauty, the sensuality, the love, and the truth of your words. I like the play of words, and the implications. Yawgmoth told me that I might like this poem, and he was right. Je l'aime. I now must go and read the poem that inspired this one. Thank you for this poem.


    • luckynsincere
      October 27, 2008
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      Thanks so much for your very inspiring comment Yawgmoth is so sweet. I am so pleased that you enjoyed!!

      Mel


  • Yawgmoth
    October 24, 2008
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    Bravo this gives me shivers and what more can I say then wow. *blushes* -Yawgmoth


    • luckynsincere
      October 24, 2008
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      Thanks so much!! I hope you are doing well... havent heard from you in a while.


  • shimmer
    October 22, 2008

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    i am beginning to think that this challenge was too easy as it seems i am giving everyone a perfect score this round. to make it official here is my score,

    spelling/presentation=20
    how well you handled the challenge=20
    grab me=20
    presentation=20
    overall=20

    total=100


    • luckynsincere
      October 23, 2008
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      Thanks so much for your score I love the inspiration rounds!!

      Mel


  • tanzanite
    October 22, 2008

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    I am going to run out of perfect scores. This is exactly the reason why I love your work so much. you have an unique voice that permeates even the shadow pieces you write. You brought a whole new dimension to this and I loved every image, metaphor and word you infused into my being. It is always a pleasure and an honor to read your work.

    Spelling/ grammar/ punctuation: 20

    Creativity/ presentation: 20

    How well you handled the challenge: 20

    Grab me effect: 20

    Overall: 20

    Total: Not 20 but 100


    • luckynsincere
      October 23, 2008
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      Tanzy,
      AWES that is the best compliment EVER! Thank you so much for your inspirational message

      Mel


  • Corvus Corone
    October 22, 2008
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    OH wow I love this Mel, appeals to my artist side as well as my erotic. Oh wow wow wow wow!!!!


  • Beautiful Liar
    October 22, 2008

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    This is sooo beautiful. I loved it and am still loving after I stopped reading it. It is truly a wonderful piece of work.


  • Riftkin gold member
    October 22, 2008

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    This is pure awesome my dear, and I love the way you have it painted out. This is perfect with the one you used to inspired you.

    for a job well done.

    Riftkin


  • UnHoLy-VeNgEaNcE
    October 22, 2008
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    amazing


  • Master Ktulu silver member
    October 22, 2008

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    This is beautifully done. It's not loaded with strong words nor is it sexual. The beauty of a woman is highly erotic and it paints a wonderful picture in the mind of the reader. Well done Mel.

    spelling/grammar/punctuation-20 PERFECT!

    presentation/creativity-20

    how well you handled the challenge-20

    "grab me" effect (how much did we enjoy reading this piece)-20

    overall-20

    Total-100

    **Master Ktulu**

    • luckynsincere
      October 22, 2008
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      much appreciated I do love to go a bit abstract with my sensual Perhaps could have given more sensual gravity! Will edit

      thanks much!

      Mel


  • tomisb
    October 22, 2008

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    This draws me into the sensations I would create and the response I would discover with each stroke. Deliciously done.
    Love, Tom B.


  • Moons Lunar Angel
    October 21, 2008
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    This is so beautiful. Well done with this Mel.
    Lil


  • lianna27
    October 21, 2008

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    this has such an amazing way of expressing the words...whole ordeal...simply amazing great job
    -lindsay


    • luckynsincere
      October 22, 2008
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      Much thanks I truly appreciate you taking the time to leave such a sweet message

      Always,
      Mel

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