Star light star bright,
First star I see tonight,
I wish I may, I wish I might,
Have this wish I wish tonight,
I wish I did, I wish I could have,
Realized all the things I should have,
I wish for the past, I wish for what I should've,
I wish that we were still in love,
I'll wish for you, and I'll wish for me,
And I'll hope our love still can be.
I wish for love, and even though it's lame,
I wish that you would feel the same.
And when I go to bed this night,
I'll wish that you were with me tonight.
So star light, star bright,
First star I see tonight,
Grant me, but one wish, that I might,
Have you fall back in love with me tonight.
Author notes
Option #5, Heartbreak
A contest entry
- A Kiss by Moonlight and Starlight ♥ by Sunkissed xo.
1000 points, ended October 23, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - HUGE prompt. Lots of ideas and fun. by WordsAndWits.
440 points, ended December 2, 2008, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Random Options by Simply Simple.
1200 points, ended March 27, 2009, 50 entries
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Comments
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Interesting take on an old rhyme. But... I didn't feel it was very original to be entirely honest. It was good... But sort of cliche.
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A/N: Prompt, Starlight
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I love the imagery in this. Congrats on winning the bronze.
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This is very beautiful! The only thing I could comment on, is that it is sort of copying the original verse written "Star Light, Star bright, First star I see tonight" That phrase. It is very stunning, and I hope you win that other contest! Best of luck in my contest and thanks for entering!!
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This is a very heartfelt and stirring poem, you create a good sense of emotion and hope through your lovely words. A great entry. Thanks so much for entering the contest; best of luck in it!
Chin up,
Katie
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I thought it could be better...
There could have been better description, and more actual physical refrence.
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