Tranquil multihued waters
rest calm as crisp leaves rustle;
A sunshade branches out,
where bare feet have tread
and minnows have nibbled.
Today awaits their arrival,
Yellow rafts and orange flippers;
boys’ laughter grows closer
as clothes are shed down the hill.
“Last one in is a rotten egg.”
Author notes
Paloszoo/Amaranthine Lover
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A contest entry
- Semi Quickie contest by Reptile Lady by Reptile Lady.
700 points, ended October 23, 2008, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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This was beautifully written; so many colours in it - and the picture matches your words beautifully, you really brought it to 'life' even without the accompanying picture there, I think we would all still have come to the same image conclusion -
Excellent work, thank you for entering -
reminds me of days I've spent at creeks in small towns. very vivid and delightful. I enjoyed this.
thanks for sharing.
<3
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well, this poem sure takes me there, nice imagery, and i love the minnows nibbling...i had a swimming hole like this when i was young... thanks for entering.
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a nice little piece
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A beautiful write, great imagery and I love the warm feeling you get from reading it. Thanks for your entry and good luck.
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What a lovely nostalgic piece! I have been there & believe me, in my adulthood, I wish I could be there again!
Thank you for your entry & good luck. -
thanks for the trip down memory lane. nice warm summers jumping into cool clear waters. And friends and cousins laughing as everyone is having a wonderful time. Thanks for sharing this lovely write. and thanks for entering it into my contest.
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what a wonderful picture you have filled my mind with.
I can visualize my two eldest sons as young boys in this one
Thank you for your entry
Best wishes
Julie
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haha ace
luved it
can feel dis happening
gd luck in de lovely ladies contest
cheers abe
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This one made me smile. Especially the last line. I can remember that phrase alot when I was a kid. Great job.
Mike
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Excellent imagery and within this piece.
Very well written and versed.
Love the last line!
Well Done & Good Luck
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