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The Excommunicant

The smoke that drifts from candle’s wick,

Oft burns the eyes and nose.

The light now gone was bright and true,

Until the sylph arose.

The bell rests silent on the books,

Its toll and echo, gone.

Some thought its sound would certainly

Go on and on and on.

The fleshless skull, grotesque and stark,

Once heard and saw and spoke.

The timeless watch no longer ticks,

As lifeless as the smoke.

Bell, book and candle tell the tale,

The death toll from the bell,

The excommunicant’s heard sound,

Condemning him to hell.

The book now closed to separate

The soul from Holy Church,

Sent out to roam, to seek relief,

An endless, fruitless search.

The candle snuffed, the soul now gone,
Extinguished in its prime.

Condemned to Hades fiery heat

For everlasting time.

Author notes

The bell, book, and candle there somehow reminded me of the excommunication ritual that the church used to use, a symbolism of what was being done:

1. A bell was rung to symbolize a death toll.
2. The holy book was closed to show separation from the church.
3. A candle was snuffed to indicate the soul being extinguished.

I tried to use that in the poem here - hope you can find it there.

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"Extinguished Essence (01)" by Melissa Byrd

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  • stella187
    November 17, 2008
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    Brilliant


  • Titus gold member
    October 30, 2008
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    this has a burning sensation that would ward off any would be smoking habit,. well done.


  • Veronica Leigh
    October 29, 2008

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    This is so good. Really creative and interesting too. Fantastic job.

    I really enjoyed this


  • g r e y i s m
    October 24, 2008

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    The title caught my eye. Just had to check it out. Nice! I like the background hee hee... fits the halloween spirit.


  • mitchybaby
    October 22, 2008
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    oops I forgot to give you my applause....haha

  • mitchybaby
    October 22, 2008

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    This is my kind of poem dad!!! Great job, you can write some pretty amazing dark poetry as well as "happy" poetry haha. Like I have said before you have that amazing talent where you can write about anything!! Blow my mind dad. AWESOME WRITE!! LOVE YOU MORE!!!


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    October 22, 2008

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    I am very impressed! This is an incredible write. You captured a very unique view of the image and produced a fantastic poem in every way. Well done! Thank you for entering and good luck!


  • Legend silver member
    October 22, 2008
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    Excellent

    As ever great rhyme and flow with a interesting story told Well done Good luck in the contest

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