Hello?
Hello?
Hello, sir.
Could you please direct me to the exit?
The escape route?
Sir? Sir?
I can't
I can't seem to find a way out
I'm trapped -
Trapped in your silver-tongued lies.
You've encaged my heart -
My mind.
I'm beating fists
Sobbing
Beating uselessly
against the walls of my own mind...
I know I should let go.
[I can't.
I can't.]
I'm trapped -
Trapped in your promises.
Tangled in your broken oaths.
Beating against my own mind,
Trying to pull open the escape hatch -
Tugging at its rusty hinges.
Where am I?
[Right here.
Here.
Feel the sun.]
I can't.
I can't.
Can someone direct me
to the escape route?
I'm trapped -
Trapped.
Burning within my own mind
Trapped.
[Please, sir?
Can you direct me
to the exit?]
I'm trapped.
Welcome to Hell.
Author notes
Er.... If anyone gets this, let me know 
For a contest (the domains of Hell)
A contest entry
- Let us take on the Domain of HELL....all metaphors welcome! by ears2hearyou.
1200 points, ended November 7, 2008, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make this THE largest Contest EVER on AP [enter, enter, enter!] by Symphony.
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I don't know that I got YOUR inspiration, but I liekd what i read of this;
i think we all feel like we're lost and screaming and nobody notices someimtes.
thanks for entering -
wow, dark!!!!! good job paradox! bravo!!! err brava hehe good work!
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Thank you
It's strange, most of my poems are really dark, but I'm not like that at all... 
Anyways, thank you
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i know zactly what u talkin bout, girl... creepy. good luck... 16000 is a lot of points... if u win u might have to share it because it would be SUCH a burden...lol
my02u,
lovey
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I just randomly entered
Really? You do? I've been trying to figure that out...
Actually, I was looking through my poems, and I realized they're basically all deppressive love poems... and I'm not really like that at all *shrugs* oh well...
-Paradox
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I felt the frenzy and confusion in your words, I liked the foundation of this and where you were taking it, I would have liked to see more depth and descriptions, but overall it was very nicely done.
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Trippingdicular!
This is frightful, and it reaches a crisis level! Being trapped is akin to crush syndrome, for if you stay in it too long, you get used to it(hell) -- really scary stuff. Good at Halloween, at that. Peace. -
Superb plus
Wow, an incredible write, indeed. You expressed your thoughts quite well. I can personnally relate to the kind of feelings (for different reasons) that you have describe. Again, well done. -
Wow
Caged prison bars-escape proof. Greystone walls...so high. Great imagery and style. You look in the mirror and say "I'm crashin' out'a here tonight.
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Scary
I thought you were talking about hell from about the 5th line. I don't know how this poem makes me feel, but I think I could see someone lonely and trapped somewhere looking for a way out. I think you're an excellent writer. I like to imagine I know how the character in a poem feels and you helped me do this.
Keep Writing and I'll keep reading -
I like the repetition of the word trapped - it resonates well in the reader's mind.
Nice poem!
Good luck in the contest!
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Thanks
I saw this style (with the [ ]'s and whatnot) on SW and liked it.
I don't know if I like the poem much, but whatever
<= I'm obsessed with those
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Welcome
It's a really cool style.
It's a good poem!
No duh!
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