Hard day at work
Your boss is a jerk
Lay back and smoke some weed
Customers stalkin
Never stop talkin
It'll do you some good indeed
Money's run dry
Lotto tickets blown by
Take a rip and you'll feel okay
The landlord's a dick
The bills just won't stick
Put some sunshine in your day
Homework to go through
Two weeks past due
Let it relieve all your trouble
Girlfriend's a bitch
An annoying itch
Come on man make that shit bubble.
A contest entry
- i have exactly 420 comments by Deathless1.
650 points, ended November 4, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - TRIPLETS ~ painlessly! #133 Allpoetry invited by Lyndon.
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What did you think
Comments
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Nicely rhymed and flowed but the contest calls for triplet rhyme so I shall just have to enjoy this as a rhyme
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beautiful and very rhymie... lol. pretty use of words.. i think this should win the contest..
lissa baby 420
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lol...
i liked the imagery and I guess
soundagery of the bubbles
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nice way to lay back and relax...
even if you don't have problems.lol
good one
and good luck
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